tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post8016832332447257699..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #100Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger35125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-87842719164364847982010-01-19T16:03:46.298-05:002010-01-19T16:03:46.298-05:00my caveat
Something I Would Keep
Something I Migh...<br><br><a href="http://www.insearchofgiants.com/2010/01/commenting-on-silhouette.html" rel="nofollow">my caveat</a><br><br /><b>Something I Would Keep</b><br><br /><br /><b>Something I Might Tweak</b><br><br /><br />Dear Entrants #1-105,<br /><br />I have read your pieces so that I can fairly participate in the Readers' Choice vote. (I read all of them through last week, before I started commenting.) I <i>will</i> be coming back around to offer <a href="http://www.insearchofgiants.com/2010/01/commenting-on-silhouette.html" rel="nofollow">my keep/tweak comment</a>, but I didn't want anyone to snark. <br /><br />Cheers,<br />Aerin (#236)<br /><br />BTW, it's perfectly fine if you still want to snark, but this way you can choose a more appropriate subject, like the Golden Globes or those wretched Old Navy dummies.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-27785734082882528402010-01-19T10:13:29.547-05:002010-01-19T10:13:29.547-05:00Well, luckily for the rebellious (with reason) dau...Well, luckily for the rebellious (with reason) daughter, she has a mother who cares. I like the father character. Actually not, but like hating him. And your PI.catvibehttp://www.catvibe.net/blognoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-26780331732720751972010-01-17T15:36:22.245-05:002010-01-17T15:36:22.245-05:00Love the last line! And I am also left wanting mor...Love the last line! And I am also left wanting more! I can easily see a series of books starring your MC. Really enjoyed your voice, loved spending time with your story.Chris Eldinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16732006129353079344noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-57757645476007082262010-01-14T14:23:09.339-05:002010-01-14T14:23:09.339-05:00A good jump off into what could also be a good sho...A good jump off into what could also be a good short story.Rabid Foxhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13307255127156087170noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-4699452293805666092010-01-13T16:48:06.703-05:002010-01-13T16:48:06.703-05:00Nice! I hope there's more to this one. If no...Nice! I hope there's more to this one. If not, keep going!!Tracy Holczerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13626923883424982455noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-3342977091588245772010-01-13T15:43:41.773-05:002010-01-13T15:43:41.773-05:00Thanks to all of you who have read my piece and le...Thanks to all of you who have read my piece and left so many positive and kind comments. They are all much appreciated.<br /><br />I had much fun writing this flash and comments saying that it was enjoyed are the icing on the cake!Alan Griffithshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12890190137499272096noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-13557617979962791282010-01-13T12:15:39.823-05:002010-01-13T12:15:39.823-05:00Great title (I'm singing it...) and brilliant ...Great title (I'm singing it...) and brilliant description of stuck-up British bluff and blagh hunter-types. Loved the come-uppance.Lily Childshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15861288507716873813noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-31186869185847757572010-01-12T14:55:51.561-05:002010-01-12T14:55:51.561-05:00Great characterization. Hero and villain- you nail...Great characterization. Hero and villain- you nailed 'em both.Deb Smythenoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-26930691875963156052010-01-12T13:46:58.602-05:002010-01-12T13:46:58.602-05:00Not sure why the highly recommended PI had to expl...Not sure why the highly recommended PI had to explain to the client what his job was, but otherwise he does seem a strong character.Patsyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12263765378083045973noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-25964096495682336952010-01-12T13:37:08.951-05:002010-01-12T13:37:08.951-05:00I get confused I guess. I was sure I had commente...I get confused I guess. I was sure I had commented here already. But I guess not. <br /><br />Another quality piece of writing Alan. Very clean and well done. Maybe my favorite Valentine story - nah. I still like the first one of yours I read best. But this ranks right up there.MRMacrumhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01414173517957120477noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-80729737209618630812010-01-12T12:32:52.910-05:002010-01-12T12:32:52.910-05:00My top 5 was at 18.
I'd been searching for my...My top 5 was at 18.<br /><br />I'd been searching for my favourite.<br /><br />I just found it.<br /><br />Turn this into a complete novel mate. Trust me I'm from London...well...via Oldham and I ain't a cockney but....<br /><br />Brilliantly written!DILLIGAFhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16520650650468676361noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-67934428200772913662010-01-12T09:44:49.115-05:002010-01-12T09:44:49.115-05:00Excellent! Not hard to see why the girl left home....Excellent! Not hard to see why the girl left home.TLhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01613912638668399684noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-7490491078492498822010-01-12T00:40:31.017-05:002010-01-12T00:40:31.017-05:00If Wodehouse wrote noir, this would be what he wri...If Wodehouse wrote noir, this would be what he writ!<br /><br />I love this. Great tone, refreshing on the literary palate, and I am very intrigued by the mystery. I would love to read more.<br /><br />This is a standout.Laurelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06120847492230531939noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-74376619876619270752010-01-11T20:57:39.749-05:002010-01-11T20:57:39.749-05:00need more, alan...need more, alan...laughingwolfhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08873675614347328116noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-79877428986682016072010-01-11T11:36:59.199-05:002010-01-11T11:36:59.199-05:00I just love the dry sarcastic tone here!! And I ag...I just love the dry sarcastic tone here!! And I agree with Preeti's Jasom Statham assessment.Kartikhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01067636999700672077noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-4606798475274965162010-01-11T09:15:29.226-05:002010-01-11T09:15:29.226-05:00This was great! So vivid!This was great! So vivid!AngelConradiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09423318903817661244noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-39424491277822901112010-01-11T07:33:14.733-05:002010-01-11T07:33:14.733-05:00wicked, wicked writing...and to imagine that you a...wicked, wicked writing...and to imagine that you are the hundredth entry...couldnt be more fitting! :)<br /><br />Mithun Mukherjee.Scribblers Inchttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01074085561810026537noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-47135654537997013822010-01-11T02:57:10.983-05:002010-01-11T02:57:10.983-05:00Top work ang great title.Top work ang great title.NQhttp://www.hullcrimefiction.co.uknoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-38309784341482859832010-01-11T00:27:15.680-05:002010-01-11T00:27:15.680-05:00Terrific. I just have to echo what everyone else ...Terrific. I just have to echo what everyone else has said. And I love the father. I hope he isn't dead and makes at least one appearance in the ultimate story, should you choose to write it.PJDhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05028687955957107957noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-47206577661986271482010-01-10T17:53:23.405-05:002010-01-10T17:53:23.405-05:00Valentine may have got himself in a bit of a JAM t...Valentine may have got himself in a bit of a JAM there...see what I did then?<br /><br />Damn good shot!Paul D Brazillhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12881642426845398389noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-74524140544175186202010-01-10T17:38:21.048-05:002010-01-10T17:38:21.048-05:00Great characters. Would love to read more.Great characters. Would love to read more.Sarah Laurensonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09252565450452195395noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-57355163462902097042010-01-10T16:53:46.002-05:002010-01-10T16:53:46.002-05:00I love the atmospherein this piece.I love the atmospherein this piece.Craighttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04344917148662934359noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-65901104816029070682010-01-10T15:54:20.319-05:002010-01-10T15:54:20.319-05:00Left me wanting more of the detective. He reminded...Left me wanting more of the detective. He reminded me of Paul Drake from the Perry Mason series. One my all-time favourite detectives.Aniket Thakkarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311954967682696734noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-61821922560086142592010-01-10T14:53:02.329-05:002010-01-10T14:53:02.329-05:00Alan,
Valentine gets everywhere, I love him.
Gr...Alan,<br /><br />Valentine gets everywhere, I love him.<br /><br />Great piece, David.David Barberhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05006533626998905560noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-71628244780764982712010-01-10T14:47:18.099-05:002010-01-10T14:47:18.099-05:00Alan - this is excellent. Your characters are wel...Alan - this is excellent. Your characters are well formed and already we love Valentine, loathe Smithers-Jones and hope to god the daughter will be saved from her current fate as well as her parents.<br /><br />This could be the beginning of a very fine novel.JaneyVhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04951739945670483199noreply@blogger.com