tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post8264320466138835270..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #19Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger32125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-58896586756196070342008-03-04T13:33:00.000-05:002008-03-04T13:33:00.000-05:00LOL! Your sense of comedic timing is impeccable! ...LOL! Your sense of comedic timing is impeccable! The pacing is great, the dialogue is very realistic, and the ending is satisfying. Great job!Ainehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08402176500997528105noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-14722911293487440242008-03-04T09:20:00.000-05:002008-03-04T09:20:00.000-05:00Ha! Actually, bears eat a bunch of material to pl...Ha! Actually, bears eat a bunch of material to plug up the system. When they wake up, they pass the "plug." Great dialog! The characterization shined through. High marks!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-80587647945955969092008-02-29T07:16:00.000-05:002008-02-29T07:16:00.000-05:00sweet story!!!!sweet story!!!!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17353823072805304712noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-51527753320545196932008-02-28T22:23:00.000-05:002008-02-28T22:23:00.000-05:00Okay, I have to tell this story - we were at the z...Okay, I have to tell this story - we were at the zoo the morning before I read this. In the bathrooms, they have a woman reciting all kinds of poop facts (truly.) And she talked about how bears don't poop when they're hibernating.<BR/><BR/>So to read this story was FABulous. I kept wondering if Ello was in the bathroom at that zoo that morning! *grin*<BR/><BR/>Once again, though, it wouldn't have been as effective if it had been written poorly. Great dialogue.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-77116838885037672782008-02-28T13:17:00.000-05:002008-02-28T13:17:00.000-05:00You captured the inquisitive nature of children be...You captured the inquisitive nature of children beautifully.wrath999https://www.blogger.com/profile/10964105112015979524noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-82020056289786334512008-02-28T10:01:00.000-05:002008-02-28T10:01:00.000-05:00Having 2 sons and a daughter this conversation is ...Having 2 sons and a daughter this conversation is a familiar one. Bodily functions and 3-year-olds go hand in (normally) unwashed hand.<BR/><BR/>Thank you for making me laugh. Great piece!JaneyVhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04951739945670483199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-59206166207785683352008-02-28T02:48:00.000-05:002008-02-28T02:48:00.000-05:00I love this kid, lol.Very nice!I love this kid, lol.<BR/>Very nice!rainehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04258822737734173873noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-22112089133696157462008-02-27T12:32:00.000-05:002008-02-27T12:32:00.000-05:00So very true to life! Thanks for such a wonderful...So very true to life! Thanks for such a wonderfully funny approach! The dialogue is perfect!Preciehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05071233480999640713noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-79451261417088164192008-02-26T21:41:00.000-05:002008-02-26T21:41:00.000-05:00Right on. As a mom of four year old, I can tell y...Right on. As a mom of four year old, I can tell you you nailed it.<BR/><BR/>Thanks for adding some well-written humor to the competition.Hoodiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17616427797201977083noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-19872585238204873512008-02-25T13:49:00.000-05:002008-02-25T13:49:00.000-05:00Wow! More comments! Thanks so much for enjoying my...Wow! More comments! Thanks so much for enjoying my piece. Since my 3 are all girls, this is definitely a conversation that occurs irregardless of having sons or daughter.<BR/><BR/>And do trees poop is another great questions! I will have to perculate on that one!Ello - Ellen Ohhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311917335471167591noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-39360631114494609932008-02-25T07:20:00.000-05:002008-02-25T07:20:00.000-05:00Ello, this is sweet!Ello, this is sweet!Bernitahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05264585685253812090noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-14912229865670155472008-02-24T23:09:00.000-05:002008-02-24T23:09:00.000-05:00That was hilarious! I have four daughters, and thi...That was hilarious! I have four daughters, and this conversation could have just as easily happened here. The question is, "Do trees poop?"Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-7857186058605320452008-02-24T20:49:00.000-05:002008-02-24T20:49:00.000-05:00Rings true. Totally. As a dad of two young boys,...Rings true. Totally. As a dad of two young boys, I understand. Especially the legalistic ending where they adhere to the stated regulations but manage to engage in the same discourse. Four smiles out of four.PJDhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05028687955957107957noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-80785058797204732592008-02-24T09:23:00.000-05:002008-02-24T09:23:00.000-05:00I never thought about the first bear poop after hi...I never thought about the first bear poop after hibernation, but now I have my next research project. Very good dialog and very funny. Nice job Ello!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-86208715444225707532008-02-24T06:24:00.000-05:002008-02-24T06:24:00.000-05:00I don't think anyone else could have pulled it off...I don't think anyone else could have pulled it off so elegantly. This 'poop thing' is becoming an emblematic topic of yours, Ello.<BR/>But come on, it's inevitable. And fun.<BR/>*still laughing!*SzélsőFahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11600289147447182465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-399001114926977382008-02-24T05:37:00.000-05:002008-02-24T05:37:00.000-05:00Oh that was priceless! Brilliant and very realist...Oh that was priceless! Brilliant and very realistic dialogue and interaction! ;-)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04871239587214383387noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-66016598387110851772008-02-23T20:25:00.000-05:002008-02-23T20:25:00.000-05:00Ello, as always, you slay me. This was such great,...Ello, as always, you slay me. <BR/><BR/>This was such great, authentic dialogue. You nailed it, my friend. And of course, my own kids are asking me why I'm laughing so hard.<BR/><BR/>I told them it was about poop. They understood. ;)Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-62306376505991424232008-02-23T18:50:00.000-05:002008-02-23T18:50:00.000-05:00Hello everyone! Thanks so much for your comments! ...Hello everyone! Thanks so much for your comments! I am so pleased that you all liked it! In this piece, Tommy is actually all 3 of my children in a conversation that occurred last year, actually, but which I have a hard time forgetting. For the story, it was easier to make one child out of three and make him a boy! I changed up the sequence and the timing of the dialogue from what was really said so that it read better and tighter for a short story. I'm just glad it worked! <BR/><BR/>thanks again everyone!Ello - Ellen Ohhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311917335471167591noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-62155775132165546142008-02-23T15:23:00.000-05:002008-02-23T15:23:00.000-05:00This was a hoot. Like every person who's had a son...This was a hoot. Like every person who's had a son, I said, "That's my child!". Very believable. Extremely funny.r2https://www.blogger.com/profile/15050444327059086880noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-41515941463198810112008-02-23T12:55:00.000-05:002008-02-23T12:55:00.000-05:00I am so glad I missed this one late last night - I...I am so glad I missed this one late last night - I would have woke everyone. How old is this kid? I think he lives in my house! This was so much fun, and artfully done.Missyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16638784910676212171noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-53432235998130379212008-02-23T08:14:00.000-05:002008-02-23T08:14:00.000-05:00This made for a nice change of pace amongst all th...This made for a nice change of pace amongst all the sad tales.pattinase (abbott)https://www.blogger.com/profile/02916037185235335846noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-51220911460569148452008-02-23T06:07:00.000-05:002008-02-23T06:07:00.000-05:00You write humor very well. Your pacing is spot on!...You write humor very well. Your pacing is spot on!!<BR/>Nice job!!!Chris Eldinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11794946908789120139noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-68785602102763571292008-02-23T05:21:00.000-05:002008-02-23T05:21:00.000-05:00Yes, amusing, all the best elements of those "wher...Yes, amusing, all the best elements of those "where the hell are we going with this" conversations with kids. Believable whether true or not.Gonehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17979621132151870323noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-9416672528917128552008-02-22T17:15:00.000-05:002008-02-22T17:15:00.000-05:00ello,OMG you have to realize that I'm, writing thi...ello,<BR/>OMG you have to realize that I'm, writing this after many minutes of floor rolling laughter. My wife says that this is a true story, which to my mind makes it all the better.<BR/> i will retell this story again and again.<BR/>relrelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09030572981830789370noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-20190745289676555892008-02-22T15:45:00.000-05:002008-02-22T15:45:00.000-05:00This was so cute!This was so cute!24crayonshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07171296576635888502noreply@blogger.com