tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post8268818464478247096..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #95Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger17125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-87446510324938208782011-07-31T15:07:19.030-04:002011-07-31T15:07:19.030-04:00Yikes, not a good position to be in. The coldness...Yikes, not a good position to be in. The coldness and threat of the room came across well.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-25298775209143400002011-07-25T20:07:16.550-04:002011-07-25T20:07:16.550-04:00Funny that JR said clinical...because I thought of...Funny that JR said clinical...because I thought of the book/movie Coma. Not exactly but that's where my mind jumped. This feels to me like an opening scene to a much more dramatic story. I'd love to see where it goes.Preciehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05071233480999640713noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-29382679478843647722011-07-24T18:40:42.499-04:002011-07-24T18:40:42.499-04:00Please tell me they were zombies. Please, please,...Please tell me they were zombies. Please, please, please? Otherwise we don't have ANY zombie entries and I'm SUCH a sucker for zombies.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-50198150389786242802011-07-24T18:36:15.075-04:002011-07-24T18:36:15.075-04:00Thanks to everyone for the comments and feedback. ...Thanks to everyone for the comments and feedback. I had fun with this one.Drewhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10523069660873286497noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-40882888558492641792011-07-23T19:33:18.088-04:002011-07-23T19:33:18.088-04:00I think you could tighten the writing, by making i...I think you could tighten the writing, by making it more direct and eliminating some prepositions, but this was a creepy entry. Thanks!Richard Levangiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16596356126446766607noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-85859377192968229392011-07-23T13:00:11.274-04:002011-07-23T13:00:11.274-04:00Ohh. Excellent ending, brought to life with vivid...Ohh. Excellent ending, brought to life with vivid description. I felt your character's panic radiate from the page. Nicely done.<br /><br />Thanks for sharing!Michele Zugnonihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12394802719932859470noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-50006817986189674472011-07-22T18:53:13.880-04:002011-07-22T18:53:13.880-04:00Oh no, don't stop there! What happened!!??
G...Oh no, don't stop there! What happened!!?? <br /><br />Great stuff!! Thank you, take care<br />xOld Kittyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13185547869183611159noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-13678935895157014222011-07-22T18:11:57.306-04:002011-07-22T18:11:57.306-04:00Chilling. Was with her in the room. Liked the int...Chilling. Was with her in the room. Liked the intimacy of her using the sheet to cover when others had not. Interesting her hands were free to unstrap her feet. Choices?<br /><br />Good work!Rachelhttp://artsdaughter.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-42467115064199776162011-07-22T16:12:30.262-04:002011-07-22T16:12:30.262-04:00The escape is no escape at all! Nice twist. Well d...The escape is no escape at all! Nice twist. Well done! ~Jana Abluesugarpoethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14775769108087898456noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-8075558540388044032011-07-22T01:40:27.740-04:002011-07-22T01:40:27.740-04:00Terrifying, the fear of what is in front of us, co...Terrifying, the fear of what is in front of us, compared to what is yet to come. Well-crafted piece!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-68658272972787919752011-07-21T10:22:17.289-04:002011-07-21T10:22:17.289-04:00an unknown and fearsome territory that becomes eve...an unknown and fearsome territory that becomes even worse.... uh, like a nightmare... *shudders*SzélsőFahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11600289147447182465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-24493437801816944912011-07-21T09:39:00.229-04:002011-07-21T09:39:00.229-04:00The setting is very "clinical," yet &quo...The setting is very "clinical," yet "surreal." I liked how you incorporated more than one hand closing in. Nicely done.jrthumbprintshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14552633595464969740noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-47153292828462806302011-07-21T05:40:39.972-04:002011-07-21T05:40:39.972-04:00Well, I will remind myself not to open creepy door...Well, I will remind myself not to open creepy doors next time...<br />I liked your piece... :)Erratic Thoughtshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14852558150033296079noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-33554373777126324182011-07-20T19:40:45.197-04:002011-07-20T19:40:45.197-04:00Oh... I like it. Creepy and hellish.. Does it get ...Oh... I like it. Creepy and hellish.. Does it get much better?<br /><br />Nicely done!<br /><br />Dottie :)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08688849410604429533noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-82504137685898290022011-07-20T15:55:51.557-04:002011-07-20T15:55:51.557-04:00Oooooh. Very creepy. Now I wonder what is on the o...Oooooh. Very creepy. Now I wonder what is on the other side!Aimee Lainehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15201246474625590886noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-31524416523293883582011-07-20T15:05:59.637-04:002011-07-20T15:05:59.637-04:00This has a creepy (in a good way)sci-fi feel. Coul...This has a creepy (in a good way)sci-fi feel. Could be alien abduction, human expermentation, lots of possibilities. But the idea that this could also be Hell offers another twist and a different connotation.Deb Smythehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10990130480508998598noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-11003783237818801182011-07-20T12:43:07.242-04:002011-07-20T12:43:07.242-04:00Terrifying concept. That feeling of being control...Terrifying concept. That feeling of being controlled by the unknown is something from nightmares. You've captured that. Nice work.Jonihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18109855683749612076noreply@blogger.com