tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post8288182221064065190..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #79Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger19125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-39140274349795989812011-07-31T13:25:45.973-04:002011-07-31T13:25:45.973-04:00What a great concept! Loved that idea. Very momo...What a great concept! Loved that idea. Very momorable.<br /><br />Congrats on Forties Club!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-44056746754000192462011-07-25T18:45:22.414-04:002011-07-25T18:45:22.414-04:00Creation as the backlash of the foolish games of t...Creation as the backlash of the foolish games of two bored children? What a totally unique and intriguing premise. Eve and Dawn. Excellent.JaneyVhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04951739945670483199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-70362496465400965542011-07-24T22:18:12.004-04:002011-07-24T22:18:12.004-04:00Yay, another Eve! I love that she has a twin, and ...Yay, another Eve! I love that she has a twin, and I like your sense of dialogue and action, hard to do in 250 words!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-51002909531227241552011-07-23T11:19:26.221-04:002011-07-23T11:19:26.221-04:00Jay: The BIg Bang in 250 words — ambitious! I like...Jay: The BIg Bang in 250 words — ambitious! I like how much fun you have with it, and how it all began as a kind of dare!Richard Levangiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16596356126446766607noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-87269853602455947722011-07-23T10:07:50.104-04:002011-07-23T10:07:50.104-04:00I liked the rhythm of the story, here. I thought i...I liked the rhythm of the story, here. I thought it worked well and left me wanting more.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15675220785164388203noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-46996251721734356442011-07-23T03:26:33.404-04:002011-07-23T03:26:33.404-04:00Intriguing concept brought to life with vivid deta...Intriguing concept brought to life with vivid detail. I love the twins' names.<br /><br />Thank you for sharing!Michele Zugnonihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12394802719932859470noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-41324649840859645982011-07-22T20:37:51.108-04:002011-07-22T20:37:51.108-04:00Still pondering....liked it a lot! Very impressed ...Still pondering....liked it a lot! Very impressed you had females in charge...In the beginning....<br /><br />Loved the last line....<br /><br />Still pondering...Rachelhttp://artsdaughter.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-16992424187619691382011-07-22T18:09:00.951-04:002011-07-22T18:09:00.951-04:00What a build-up!!!!! Wonderful!! Of course Eve and...What a build-up!!!!! Wonderful!! Of course Eve and her twin Dawn created all life! Yay! take care<br />xOld Kittyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13185547869183611159noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-87969950603556576902011-07-21T17:18:04.059-04:002011-07-21T17:18:04.059-04:00What a great interpretation of the Big Bang!What a great interpretation of the Big Bang!Katherine Tomlinsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09696623795926663895noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-2449283724851645772011-07-21T16:22:26.760-04:002011-07-21T16:22:26.760-04:00I just knew that creation had a woman's touch!...I just knew that creation had a woman's touch! ;) I like your clever take on a timeless tale. ~Jana Abluesugarpoethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14775769108087898456noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-15343172126463676422011-07-20T00:50:59.503-04:002011-07-20T00:50:59.503-04:00Ahhh... so this is how the universe was created? ...Ahhh... so this is how the universe was created? I love the word play of the names... Eve and Dawn... the eve of the dawn of life kind of thing.<br /><br />Nicely done!<br /><br />Dottie :)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08688849410604429533noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-41661412504755386002011-07-20T00:39:02.746-04:002011-07-20T00:39:02.746-04:00The big bang theory in your hands is masterful! Si...The big bang theory in your hands is masterful! Sisters fighting, then on the same side, then really mucking up the world--better than reality tv.<br /><br />I liked this one, Jay.pegjethttp://pegjet.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-39917924162373088042011-07-19T20:02:13.783-04:002011-07-19T20:02:13.783-04:00I like this version of the beginning of time. Love...I like this version of the beginning of time. Lovely story.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04283371140346602856noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-19304473949600402752011-07-19T19:52:58.223-04:002011-07-19T19:52:58.223-04:00Very cool. The creation of the universe as child&#...Very cool. The creation of the universe as child's play.Preciehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05071233480999640713noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-36795576527589049712011-07-19T17:55:22.899-04:002011-07-19T17:55:22.899-04:00The names of these characters work well. Fitting ...The names of these characters work well. Fitting how Eve works on so many different levels. <br /><br />Third to last paragraph (<i>Light bleached the heavens...</i>) brought me there. I could see it.<br /><br />Good job!Catrinanoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-63335848885807300722011-07-19T14:45:07.526-04:002011-07-19T14:45:07.526-04:00If a clock ticks in a primordial soup and no one i...If a clock ticks in a primordial soup and no one is around to hear, will it still make me late for work?Linda Ryan-Harperhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15164148666810818891noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-36546916220262724632011-07-19T13:28:05.391-04:002011-07-19T13:28:05.391-04:00And interesting way of restarting or creating time...And interesting way of restarting or creating time!Aimee Lainehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15201246474625590886noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-58051007535939488262011-07-19T11:27:46.500-04:002011-07-19T11:27:46.500-04:00I loved the ending with 'time' started fro...I loved the ending with 'time' started from the big bang event. Very creative and imaginative.<br /> <br />-TimTimothy P. Remphttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04422296532550497806noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-79105315598744445392011-07-19T08:16:38.104-04:002011-07-19T08:16:38.104-04:00Great characters, and a magic that doesn't see...Great characters, and a magic that doesn't seem contrived. <br /><br />The ending is great too - leaves us wondering.Chris Alliniottehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04094925215735680849noreply@blogger.com