tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post8766988148275817134..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Forties Club Finalist #21Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger24125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-90090888540968922322010-08-01T00:09:18.277-04:002010-08-01T00:09:18.277-04:00OH! The end really makes this piece shine! I'd...OH! The end really makes this piece shine! I'd love to read more of the story if there was any. So much possibility. :)Michelle D. Argylehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09696465137285587646noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-24985044155582114082010-07-30T09:55:20.677-04:002010-07-30T09:55:20.677-04:00A lot of my favorite stories here are those that w...A lot of my favorite stories here are those that work in and of themselves, short stories full of richness but not asking for more. This... isn't one of them, and I love it.<br /><br />I think it's perfect as it is, but I also love that I want to see the rest of the world it is set in! This could definitely be part of a larger work. <br /><br />Nicely done.bekbekhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17935766604154823539noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-47578457243867334322010-07-29T12:57:29.242-04:002010-07-29T12:57:29.242-04:00As soon as I saw the "200 degrees" I kne...As soon as I saw the "200 degrees" I knew it was dragon eggs and I got way too excited!<br /><br />I love your casual pacing and voice in this piece. It's as if your characters were like, "Oh, sweet, it's those dragon eggs we've been looking for."<br /><br />I, too, want to know what happens next. Because mama is gonna be pissed when she gets back to her nest. <br /><br />Great job!Vincent Kalehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04625863843215035035noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-17358406600383471742010-07-29T07:20:04.481-04:002010-07-29T07:20:04.481-04:00That was an Oliver Twist. As in "Please, sir,...That was an Oliver Twist. As in "Please, sir, may I have some more?"<br /><br />Love the dragon eggs, love that they've always been seeking and stumble across them now.<br /><br />And the temperature detail is a nice little insert to lend authority to the alternate reality.Laurelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06120847492230531939noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-20673673357335314032010-07-29T04:35:52.900-04:002010-07-29T04:35:52.900-04:00This piece flowed beautifully and was a pleasure t...This piece flowed beautifully and was a pleasure to read. I guessed dragons at the jewels in the nest bit but then again I am very partial to a dragon story.JaneyVhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04951739945670483199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-39360204440372420242010-07-28T17:15:50.422-04:002010-07-28T17:15:50.422-04:00I love the jewels-as-eggs idea.
Move over goose, ...I love the jewels-as-eggs idea.<br /><br />Move over goose, layer of golden eggs. The dragon's in town.<br /><br />Nice piece of writing.Jonihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18109855683749612076noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-39753594223165291592010-07-28T09:32:35.138-04:002010-07-28T09:32:35.138-04:00Great job of pacing. Loved the ending. I wasn'...Great job of pacing. Loved the ending. I wasn't expecting dragon eggs! <br /><br />Nice job.Deb Smythehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10990130480508998598noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-21381520555143905162010-07-28T05:10:46.719-04:002010-07-28T05:10:46.719-04:00A neat look into the future; and a neat story too....A neat look into the future; and a neat story too.McKoalahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01457446171624585099noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-15258969280490289002010-07-28T05:04:00.779-04:002010-07-28T05:04:00.779-04:00I really liked this. It felt unforced and I enjoye...I really liked this. It felt unforced and I enjoyed the story.fairyhedgehoghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14141089706966852951noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-89098725689190509012010-07-27T22:45:00.260-04:002010-07-27T22:45:00.260-04:00Hi Lisa!
Nicely done, I didn't expect Dragons...Hi Lisa!<br /><br />Nicely done, I didn't expect Dragons. I'd like to read more of this story.<br /><br />Dottie :)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08688849410604429533noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-82618223198396248362010-07-24T23:52:53.272-04:002010-07-24T23:52:53.272-04:00Woohoo, Lisa! Good to see you here. I love how the...Woohoo, Lisa! Good to see you here. I love how the "gems" sparkled like beacons in the sunlight. What a gorgeous vision, and great foreshadowing of whether they will be good or evil. Dragons in the US of A? I suppose we needed something to fend off these zombie apocalypse. (Teasing). Great work, girl!Jodi MacArthurhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13373591664178281529noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-56551412363272421582010-07-23T16:45:43.410-04:002010-07-23T16:45:43.410-04:00Dragons! There's just not enough of them. I lo...Dragons! There's just not enough of them. I loved your story.jelismorganhttp://jasminelismorgan.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-49938374156041042862010-07-23T15:58:24.102-04:002010-07-23T15:58:24.102-04:00Love the voice and the flow. And being a collector...Love the voice and the flow. And being a collector of dragons, the subject matter is spot on.<br /><br />Great name for your character, too.<br /><br />;-)Sarah Laurensonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09252565450452195395noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-56731200776304540312010-07-23T13:17:04.367-04:002010-07-23T13:17:04.367-04:00Very enjoyable read! I easily found myself right t...Very enjoyable read! I easily found myself right there with them.Michael Morsehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07451637745981389920noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-85122956251053289502010-07-23T03:24:21.031-04:002010-07-23T03:24:21.031-04:00The writing world can never have enough of Dragons...The writing world can never have enough of Dragons. Thats my stand. I love everything about them, such as this piece.Aniket Thakkarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311954967682696734noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-59250766470320363022010-07-23T02:19:21.341-04:002010-07-23T02:19:21.341-04:00And what happens next???And what happens next???Katherine Tomlinsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09696623795926663895noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-65466746614024201192010-07-22T23:19:44.566-04:002010-07-22T23:19:44.566-04:00Aptly titled piece. The pacing was consistent thro...Aptly titled piece. The pacing was consistent throughout. Original too.JR's Thumbprintshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10479324326541901987noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-10478991872493228612010-07-22T20:06:39.451-04:002010-07-22T20:06:39.451-04:00I too like the fact that they found it when they w...I too like the fact that they found it when they weren't looking, but they were prepared anyway.PJDhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05028687955957107957noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-60791445801794147002010-07-22T18:11:25.289-04:002010-07-22T18:11:25.289-04:00This one was so awesome-amazing what can happen wh...This one was so awesome-amazing what can happen when you don't actually look for something.Oddyoddyo13https://www.blogger.com/profile/05557994037779209704noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-91151574209781555882010-07-22T17:50:30.323-04:002010-07-22T17:50:30.323-04:00I was thinking dragon. :) Nice job!I was thinking dragon. :) Nice job!Aimee Lainehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15201246474625590886noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-64884254761934781412010-07-22T17:02:03.087-04:002010-07-22T17:02:03.087-04:00Great idea. Great story. Love the idea of dragons....Great idea. Great story. Love the idea of dragons.cleemckenziehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15456109243453726483noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-71450723148001074132010-07-22T16:31:38.505-04:002010-07-22T16:31:38.505-04:00Really cool - naturally dragon eggs would hold the...Really cool - naturally dragon eggs would hold the fire of gemstones. Great story!Jade L Blackwaterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15321787298101881675noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-78237330650335436572010-07-22T16:24:19.247-04:002010-07-22T16:24:19.247-04:00This was well done. Perfect displays of emotions, ...This was well done. Perfect displays of emotions, and loved the "... insulated enough to maintain their two hundred degree temperature for several hours." Small detail, but one that makes the story real.pegjethttp://pegjet.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-75251004756810261412010-07-22T15:38:32.509-04:002010-07-22T15:38:32.509-04:00Love, love, love this! Go Lisa!Love, love, love this! Go Lisa!Julie Musilhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02150454913885915017noreply@blogger.com