tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post9205937288539793068..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Guest Writer - Sarah HinaJason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger35125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-77606200691218704792011-07-24T21:26:39.064-04:002011-07-24T21:26:39.064-04:00I've read quite a few birthing/ pregnancy stor...I've read quite a few birthing/ pregnancy stories in this contest, but I liked this one hands down the best....lovely.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04283371140346602856noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-76315971483081229332011-07-24T13:26:28.573-04:002011-07-24T13:26:28.573-04:00Old Kitty: Thank you!
Richard: That's very ...Old Kitty: Thank you! <br /><br />Richard: That's very kind of you. I felt lucky to take part in this contest. Thanks, my friend.Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-62375475510642663162011-07-24T11:09:34.652-04:002011-07-24T11:09:34.652-04:00Sarah: A delightful composition brimming with styl...Sarah: A delightful composition brimming with stylish, confident prose. I didn't have to read it twice to follow, but I read it twice anyway.Richard Levangiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16596356126446766607noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-13226108099554939512011-07-24T10:41:45.773-04:002011-07-24T10:41:45.773-04:00Goodness! The baby about to be born is just scary!...Goodness! The baby about to be born is just scary! "the child blinked"! Yikes! Oh wow - poor mum! I wanted the story to continue!!Take care<br />xOld Kittyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13185547869183611159noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-50632460812651085262011-07-23T23:02:45.015-04:002011-07-23T23:02:45.015-04:00Anonymous: Wow, thank you. I do believe writing ca...Anonymous: Wow, thank you. I do believe writing can rise to art, and I'm deeply gratified you found that here.<br /><br />Cat: "Tapestry of consequence" is awesome. :) Thank you, my friend. It's always so good to see you, too. <br /><br />Mikki: and thank you for your incredibly complimentary words. I loved them all.Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-17585748247359716942011-07-23T13:37:01.090-04:002011-07-23T13:37:01.090-04:00I read this piece three times. There's someth...I read this piece three times. There's something intimately poetic in your words: a lyrical pulse beating behind the page, bringing your characters and their world to life. I felt their emotions, I saw their struggle. Excellent work.<br /><br />Thank you for your inspirational words, and for sharing your gift.Michele Zugnonihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12394802719932859470noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-40999350499552652072011-07-23T07:39:31.108-04:002011-07-23T07:39:31.108-04:00It's the way you weave the words together that...It's the way you weave the words together that makes it so masterful. Your poetic phrasing combined with the point of view combine to take this piece from a big oops story to a tapestry of consequence. It is SO good to see you HERE.Catherine Viberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01354073276671196477noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-62137219136576550382011-07-23T01:27:30.959-04:002011-07-23T01:27:30.959-04:00The last lines, for me, create in words the searin...The last lines, for me, create in words the searing contrast in the prompt. The child IS, and Clay or Jimmy or whatshername can avoid that reality. Their petty selfish actions and naïve hopes pale when the child IS. This is terrific, and the more I think about it, the more I think of it as art for real.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-32794098834490937062011-07-22T22:13:33.058-04:002011-07-22T22:13:33.058-04:00Dottie: nothing like waiting until the last minute...Dottie: nothing like waiting until the last minute! Thanks for your kind words. :)<br /><br />Joni: It's getting closer. I finally hit my stride with it, after too many wrong turns. Thanks for this--and I'm so gratified you read Plum.<br /><br />Erratic Thoughts: I'm touched by your words. I could really see that part, too. Thank you!<br /><br />Margaret: That's very sweet. Thank you, my friend. <br /><br />And yes, Aniket is ALWAYS right! Well, except for that part about liking Steve's piece more. That won't do at all. ;)<br /><br />Susan: I noticed some other people had the same interpretation. That's one of the things I love best about these contests--how the same inspiration can assume so many different shapes! <br /><br />Thank you!Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-16920997353084565782011-07-22T16:25:38.072-04:002011-07-22T16:25:38.072-04:00This is what I saw when I first looked at the phot...This is what I saw when I first looked at the photo but was unable to put into words what you did so well. Fantastic!susan ellisnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-82184817645675506382011-07-22T06:55:59.235-04:002011-07-22T06:55:59.235-04:00Sarah, you gripped me right from the start with th...Sarah, you gripped me right from the start with that opening.<br /><br />I love the way your writing is so true to life. Aniket used the word 'honest' and he was dead on! (As he always is!)<br /><br />This is something that just has to be read again and again to savour every single word.Margarethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17286909482780350161noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-57548076369024501092011-07-22T03:23:08.254-04:002011-07-22T03:23:08.254-04:00I can so sense the child's blinking...this is ...I can so sense the child's blinking...this is just beautiful...<br />"and the voice was God’s" can't beat that...just superb...:)Erratic Thoughtshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14852558150033296079noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-87459639223570252092011-07-21T23:58:06.493-04:002011-07-21T23:58:06.493-04:00Breathtaking, Sarah. You've got a such a stun...Breathtaking, Sarah. You've got a such a stunning and distinctive voice.<br /><br />I've missed you.<br />I finished PBinP ages ago. I'm ready for you WIP to be just a W. :)Jonihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18109855683749612076noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-47428920777440360572011-07-21T23:03:32.138-04:002011-07-21T23:03:32.138-04:00OMG...I'm reading along and I get to the end, ...OMG...I'm reading along and I get to the end, and I think...um...wait a minute... and I go back and read it again. Then it hits me like a ton of bricks...Clay isn't the guy who walked out the door, the one who's working the late shift. Man...no matter how long you hold your legs together, when that baby's ready to come, it's just going happen. She has some explaining to do...<br /><br />Loved it!!<br /><br />Dottie :)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08688849410604429533noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-82863183605759200702011-07-21T22:35:53.346-04:002011-07-21T22:35:53.346-04:00JA: Grr...don't get me started! ;)
Precie: I ...JA: Grr...don't get me started! ;)<br /><br />Precie: I actually chopped the word "much" before "bellyaching." We wouldn't be writers if we didn't whine...a little. ;)<br /><br />Thank you for everything you said here. <br /><br />Jason: Thanks for having me! It's a real treat to be given this opportunity. <br /><br />I think, over the years, the poetry has lessened in my prose, and for the better. But still, nothing thrills me more as a writer than to indulge that side of myself. I'm glad that's appreciated. :)<br /><br />Sandra: I love writing dialogue! Thanks for remarking on that aspect. :)Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-10888660318125260272011-07-21T22:04:54.989-04:002011-07-21T22:04:54.989-04:00Omigosh; poor Jimmy!
What an exquisite use of dia...Omigosh; poor Jimmy!<br /><br />What an exquisite use of dialogue, Sarah. It was a pleasure reading it.Sandra Cormierhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00231342310371529022noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-38452179306640787602011-07-21T19:39:34.196-04:002011-07-21T19:39:34.196-04:00I think poetry is such a wonderful tool of express...I think poetry is such a wonderful tool of expression. It doesn't deserve to be relegated just to poems! You always demonstrate how much more impact and art we can squeeze out of prose by painting with a touch of poetry.<br /><br />Thanks for guest writing, Sarah!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-24903692511801571942011-07-21T17:56:41.605-04:002011-07-21T17:56:41.605-04:00Re: writers...well, some of us are guilty of belly...Re: writers...well, some of us are guilty of bellyaching... :)<br /><br />Re: your story...I love how vividly you craft these characters...and I feel sympathy for the unborn child who is about to enter a rocky world. Wonderfully done. It's always a treat to see you work.Preciehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05071233480999640713noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-6383365379566211462011-07-21T16:43:40.884-04:002011-07-21T16:43:40.884-04:00Sarah, ha! You and the webinar.Sarah, ha! You and the webinar.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-45710577050884828762011-07-21T16:18:21.082-04:002011-07-21T16:18:21.082-04:00JA: I've become more and more brain dead as th...JA: I've become more and more brain dead as the day wears on, so all I'll say is....YAY. I made you curse! ;)<br /><br />Thank you. I'm always stupidly pleased to read your comments. Today is no exception.<br /><br />Loren: Aww...I wish him/her well. Parenthood keeps us humble, I think. Thanks. <br /><br />Wendy: WELL SAID. :)<br /><br />Charles: I missed your voice in this contest. Thank you, my friend.<br /><br />Aniket: Writing this piece was a welcome break from that book! Which, let's be honest, has been gestating for entirely TOO LONG. ;)<br /><br />I'm always overwhelmed by your comments and friendship. "Honest" means a lot to me. Hugs and thanks, my TARDIS-flying companion. :))<br /><br />SzelsoFa: You've always been a big part of these contests, and it's good to see you here again. Thank you for your warm words. <br /><br />Paul: I still think comedy's harder. ;) But thanks.Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-19053080340801137532011-07-21T16:06:57.297-04:002011-07-21T16:06:57.297-04:00Yeah, poor Jimmy.
Great work here Sarah. Showin&#...Yeah, poor Jimmy.<br /><br />Great work here Sarah. Showin' us how it's done.<br /><br />Paulstrugglingwriterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04895062852286494753noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-11366526228561897862011-07-21T15:22:09.530-04:002011-07-21T15:22:09.530-04:00you twist the reader from a seemingly happy couple...you twist the reader from a seemingly happy couple with an elbow's jerk :) only much more in a flawless way... to a totally different world. great piece.SzélsőFahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11600289147447182465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-80847493627902861712011-07-21T13:48:50.170-04:002011-07-21T13:48:50.170-04:00Charles says it all in just four words!
She sure ...Charles says it all in just four words! <br />She sure has the touch. :) <br /><br />Sarah, its been looong time that we've been travelling on the bridge of my admiration towards you and your generosity towards me. And I've not yet found a good enough way to express how your work makes me feel. If I have to put it in a word, I'll pick its - honest. <br />Its fiction but from a deep and honest place. And thats special.<br /><br />Thank you for another wonderful read. It wont keep me satisfied till your second book though. ;)<br /><br />You keep writing, we'll keep reading. That's the way the world is supposed to work. Don't ask me, how I know it.Aniket Thakkarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311954967682696734noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-80369432014496521632011-07-21T13:17:48.865-04:002011-07-21T13:17:48.865-04:00Sara has the touchSara has the touchCharles Gramlichhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02052592247572253641noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-44613444914380879112011-07-21T13:06:20.416-04:002011-07-21T13:06:20.416-04:00Oh, and JASON... thank you for having guest writer...Oh, and JASON... thank you for having guest writers!!!Wendyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03115002505324651653noreply@blogger.com