Saturday, June 24, 2006

Entry #17

"Midnight Assignation"
by Fritz Owens

I barely reached the telephone pole on time and she wasn’t there. My heart fell as I remembered our last conversation when she promised she would arrive at midnight. It was ten minutes after twelve. Then I heard her singing that silly little song she had made up about our cat. No words but silly just the same.

As the full moon broke through the clouds, I could see her coming down the road in that little jumper suit I liked so much. Her hair was tied in two pigtails. She looked like she was 16 years old. As she came closer, I said “Hey little girl! You want some candy?”

She laughed and said “you really got some?”

“Right here in my pocket. But you’re going to have to take off that silly little suit before I give you any.”

“The whole thing off?”

“That’s right, the whole thing off and everything that’s under it!”

“Wow, I don’t know about that, Mister. What if someone comes along?”

“Well, we can hide in those bushes over there, can’t we?”

She leaned against the telephone pole and coyly asked me “Is this really necessary?”

“It is if you want that candy!”

“Well, you got me there. I’m a confirmed chocaholic and you know it. It is chocolate, isn’t it?”

“You bet it is, sweetie. Your favorite. Godiva”

As she slowly took everything off, I said “How long before the baby sitter has to leave?”

“Three o’clock”.

“Perfect! Just enough time!”

[For over fifty years Fritz Owens has been a professional pianist, composer and keyboard recording artist. Check out his website at]


Flood said...

This was great. Nice twist. I love secret dates!

Anthony Rapino said...

Ha! Perverse. I love it.

Anonymous said...

Dayeemm..My computer smells like melted chocolate.
[A good read.]

John McAuley

Jaye Wells said...

I love the playfulness. Nice job.

Bhaswati said...

There's something endearing about the characters even if the relationship is illicit. Great job.

For The Trees said...

Why don't we d-DOIT in the road?
No One will be watching us,
Why don't we doit in the road?

-- John Lennon

Excellent story! Great composition in a very small space!

All I could think was, God Don't Let Those Bushes Be Poison Ivy!!!

Scott said...

I totally relate to this piece. And I don't see it as illicit. Interesting is more like it. Nice wrap up in the end.

Jerilyn Dufresne, author said...

Funny how we see different things. I saw them as a married couple putting some spice into their relationship. Loved it.

Jeff said...

I liked it. Nice playful twist.

Bhaswati said...

Whether the relationship is illicit or just plain naughty, the characters are likeable and the story, entertaining. That's what matters in the end :)

Jade L Blackwater said...

So fun and playful - I really like this one!

Anonymous said...

I'm with Jer. I immediately thought of a married couple who were spicing things up a bit. Well written.

Anonymous said...

Fritz, well constructed setup and story. Very good use of dialog. Its strength is also in the completeness of the vignette. A high scorer!