Monday, February 25, 2008

Entry #41

by Christian Seidel

”Hey, look! The humans are bringing us dinner again!”

”What? Where?”

”Down there, there's a food delivery group coming up the hill.”

”Oh, great! They are bringing rope. I bet they are going to hang our dinner in the tree again. Why can't they just leave it on the ground where it's easy to eat?”

”Yeah, I hate it when the food dangles. I get dangle-sick.”

”They really are stupid creatures, aren't they? Not like us birds!”

”Hey, they are hanging up that fat one for us.”

”Great, then there’ll be plenty for both of us. Better than that skinny man they served us last time. He was all stringy.”

”And they are shouting at us again. Why do they always do that? I mean, what’s the point in giving us food if they don't want us to eat it? It is our tree, after all.”

”That's humans for you! If they don't want us to eat him, why don't they just put him in one of those tenderizing boxes they put in the ground?”

”They always forget to dig them up again, you know. And they even mark where they put them. It's such a waste of good food.”

”You don't say.”

”I want the eyes.”

”You can't have both of them! I want one too!”

”But I saw them coming!”

”I saw the eyes first!”

”But I...”

”Shut up! They're leaving now.”

”Oh. But I saw...”

”Just shut up and eat, will you? Dinner is served!”


PJD said...

hahaha, well done. My only critical comment is that I wish you left out the "Not like us birds!" cue.

bluesugarpoet said...

Oh, that was grotesquely wonderful! Oddly, I don't feel hungry any more. :)

Beth said...

I love crows. Their job is so necessary and unappreciated. Again, I have that song "Strange Fruit" going through my head.

Ello - Ellen Oh said...

I agree with pjd, you did not need not like us birds, but otherwise, this was macabre and delicious! Er, I mean excellent! ;o)

Sarah Hina said...

Oh, this was comic and as black as a crow. Silly me...I thought they were bringing them birdseed. ;)

Very crisp, effective dialogue. And a completely original concept. Nice work!

Jaye Wells said...

I love, love, love gallows humor--pun intended. Great job.

Unknown said...

Wonderful piece of black humour. I love the take from the crows' perspective. Very original - and very well done.

DBA Lehane said...

Oh this one brought a smile to my face! Thoroughly enjoyable!

Rob said...

Very unique piece. I thought it was great. Good job!

pattinase (abbott) said...

This was a "Hoot."

SzélsőFa said...

What a nice piece of black humour. That line can be omitted I agree with others, - it gives it away too soon.

rel said...

This is a very eye catching piece!
Next to trees, crows are some of my best friends. They read tarot too.

Anonymous said...

tenderizing boxes - that's just too silly! Nicely written.

Anonymous said...

I have this piece and the zombie piece combining in my head - effectively, I might add. I just kept thinking "ewww!" So....eww! effective imagery!!

Lena said...

i wish it could be longer. A wonderful piece :)

wrath999 said...

Very humorous. I like the all dialogue. Very well done

Linda Peters said...

Fun and unique take on the prompt. I enjoyed it.

Aine said...

LOL!! I love the bickering at the end! And the tenderizing box-- too funny!

Anonymous said...

The humor and horror was an interesting mix. It hammers home different viewpoints. I pictured some of those cartoon birds or vultures. High marks!

Christian Seidel said...

Thanks for all the nice comments. Seems like you all enjoyed the reading as much as I enjoyed the writing.