Secret
by Will Irons
He swigged the liquor. It was his last. It was the first time he became sober.
As he hit the notes on the piano, his fingers danced. Like the many sessions before, his wife and daughter were captivated. They could name Mozart and Chopin as the greats. But in this musician family, he was THE GOD.
His tears began to synchronise with his music. His mind searched his recent past…
From the day he laid his eyes on her, he felt the need to be human. He struggled with it. He did it. It was not easy. The sophistication tagged with human relationships was beyond his imagination. They faced objections from her family and friends. They were pushed to poverty. They almost gave up their lives for what humans called love. They overcame the odds and kept together. He realised it was worth it…
That instance he carried his baby, he felt the need to remain rooted. Those little eyes, fingers and toes created that admission that maybe the master was right; that he had been so wrong. The kisses, hugs and words made him savour every stage of his child’s growth…
Thirty years was puny against his existence. He knew his humanity had broken down every ounce of hatred within his nature.
Yet, he must leave and the truth must be told.
He finished the last sustained note and looked at them.
He whispered, “I love you!”
The music consumed Lucifer in flames.
He was gone, forever.
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18 comments:
Interesting take. It leaves me with questions for sure. A Lucifer with a conscience? Interesting...
'bringer of light' the true father of the christ child? new concept!
Redemption for Lucifer through the birth of his child. I'm with Laughingwolf...that is a really fresh take.
The piece makes me want the backstory on the mother. That must have been some woman to tempt the Devil himself into a life of poverty!
Interating & unique. Very well done
alex
A devil of a story! The child IS the father of the man (or the devil, in this case!)
That was unexpected! I was wondering who he would prove to be. A fascinating take, beautifully handled, well done, FT!
This is truly hotter than the Devil's breath. Extra points for originaility.
Ooh, this was very thought-provoking. Well done.
But he was once God's angel...perhaps this is his redemption?
This was very good...
Well depicted.
I really enjoyed this. Waiting to see who he was and all. Very nice.
"But, honey, you know I have to go back to work. It's not like there are fewer damned souls these days! You would think that technology--databases, email, the internet--would make things easier to manage. All it's done it make it easier for people to sin. I'm swamped!"
This is one of the five or six with a significant twist where I didn't see the end coming before it hit. Nicely done. A little over the top, of course, but that's what makes it work.
And of course the irony of his family thinking of him as THE GOD. LOL.
Personally, am a big fan of Lucifer so I hate to see him succumb to our mortal emotions. :)
But I liked the piece a lot. A refreshingly original take indeed.
Thank you, my friends, for all your valuable comments!
Catvibe, him with conscience...perhaps...or i wish.
laughingwolf, i do hope you like this new concept!
Laurel, yeah, she's must be one hell of a woman. Maybe i'll find a story for their first encounter.
Alex, thanks for your encouraging words!
Ranee, i'm glad you liked it!
Vanilla, ahh, i thank you for your compliments! what can i say, NS?
JR, thank you very much!
Deb, i appreciate your warm words!
His redemption?...if only he's the author of life. thank you very much, Rebecca!
Bernard, you are kind with your words!
Sarah, i'm delighted you enjoyed this!
PJD, that's a great take of the extended story!
Aniket, a big fan of Lucifer?...Wow, hope you weren't offended. Thanks for the nice feedback!
Excellent take on the topic and a very compelling, well written tale. Impressive.
WOW! I wasn't expecting that - it was really cool.
this was interesting - nicely written. But does Lucifer know how to love anyone but himself?
As I read, I wondered about the pianist but never expected it to be Lucifer at the end.
Good job with this one.
A softer, human side of Lucifer. So inventive! Very beautiful in its own way. Great job!
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