Wednesday, May 19, 2010

What About This One?

"Geez. What about this one?"

"Which one?"

"This poem. The one called 'Uni-verse?'"

He chuckled. "I don't remember titles." He gestured at the size of the stack. "I've written a lot of poetry."

"Here. I'll read it to you:

in my dead world place
with inverted stars
I find you

the creator is underfoot
toying with plans of inflation
but this universe smokes and smolders small
and sometimes I walk there

cinders sing
and stardust mingles
in my dead world place
where I killed you

She put it down.

"Oh. That one," he said.

"Yeah. Wow."

He shrugged.

"But what does it mean?"

"I guess it means whatever you think it means."

"It's pretty dark. Disturbing."

He nodded. Contemplating. "Yes."


He stopped stirring the vegetables. They sizzled in anticipation of dinner. "But it's good to be chilled once in a while," he said.


"Because it reminds us that what we do matters."


Chatterbox said...

Beautiful message there :)
Love the magic you create with those short & sweet dialogues :D

Keep up the good work Jason!!

Felicity Grace Terry said...

I thought this very touching and quite romantic. I love the way you add these asides.

Tabitha Bird said...

Yep. I am all for a good chilling. Life without the occasional freeze is just too tepid for me. I want to be reminded that life is all its extremities exists.

Bernita said...

Much nicer than carpe diem...

Oddyoddyo13 said...

I like chilling-it has depth.

spacedlaw said...

In her shoes I'd worry about him cooking...
Excellent tale.

Atrisa said...

WOW. It sounds like an excerpt from a book...makes you want to read more.

Akasha Savage. said...

I agree, it's good to be chilled once in a while. And you do it so well!

Anonymous said...

Chatterbox, I really like exploring all sort of subtle, but powerful moments with these vignettes.

Petty Witter, definitely a moment of sharing for them.

Tabitha, it does make the entire spectrum known and present.

Bernita, a strange little exploration, this one.

Oddyooddyo13, I very much agree.

Spacedlaw, ha! I enjoy cooking.

Atrisa, that's cool. In a way, I've honed my scene-writing skills in novels with these vignettes.

Akasha, doors lead to many places. Some of them chilling.

Aniket Thakkar said...

"It means whatever you think it means" - that's pretty much how we roll. :)

I with others. Chilling is good. Right next to 'Clarity' the thing I love most is 'Chill of the night'! :D