maybe I've never quite
been here
because sometimes
I can stand and say
yes, I'm here
really here
right now
but then I'll walk
and the ground won't feel
so solid anymore
I could poke my finger
through that house
or blink
and that person's voice
could go away
perhaps I'm just a surveyor
putting down stakes
in organic lines
and musical curves
and you could live there
in what I build
because it will feel
as solid as stone
to you
but if I poke
that house
and reach for its walls
it might just
glide through
10 comments:
The builder never recognizes the solidity of the construct as the person living safely within it. It is because they don't have all the knowledge of the shortcuts the builder took, they only know that when wind and rain come they feel safe in the solidity of the construction.
it's amazing how different kinds of writings can one experience generate - but i think it also depends on the medium, that is, you.
i liked this very, very much. one of my favourites of yours.
Sometimes I wonder if everyone feels like just a wandering spirit - a sojoourner here.
Very deep, it certainly gave me something to think about.
I feel the same disconnect. Some days everything runs through my fingers.
Like water through your hands huh? Just runs right out...
Loved this Jason-the isolation was tangible. :)
Walking Man, I think that's a big part of it. The builder has a very different view than the one using it.
Szelsofa, I hope that vastly different writing and topics is one of the charms of Clarity. :) I love letting my mind go anywhere and everywhere.
Karen, I think we know that at least some of us do.
Petty Witter, then it's mission accomplished. :)
Shakespeare, it's something of a comfort to know others feel similarly.
Oddyoddyo13, that's cool to hear! That emotion wasn't my main goal, but it's definitely there. It's the skeleton of the piece.
The photo pulled me right in.
I think it all has to do with spatial awareness. Some people have little or no ability, nor inclination, to "fix" themselves in a place. I know I can't be contained within walls...no matter how hard I try. I am always reaching beyond them.
Kaye, that's definitely another side of the coin. People who can't stay in one place versus people who feel like places keep moving out from under their feet.
I loved this!
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