Monday, July 18, 2011

Entry #69

Cheating Death
by Yamini Murty

“You are steering through me.”

“Yes. I am supposed to do that.”

“Through my flesh!! Ouch!”


“Who are you?”

“I am Grim Reaper”

“You are here to take my soul away, aren’t you?”

“You have to wait and watch.”

“Hahahaa. I think you’ll have to wait forever and watch. And watch. And watch…”

“I am grabbing it.”

“That isn’t what you are looking for, Mr. Reaper, leave it.”

“I think so too.”


“Where’s your soul?”

“Find it, and take it”

“I am not here for a ruthless end. You have to die. Where’s your soul?”

“It is not in me anymore”

“Strange! I got to take you there. You see that... That’s the eternal light.”

“I see zilch. No radiance, No darkness. Nothing”


“It’s pancreatic cancer. You wouldn’t even know when it will kill you”

“Wow. So I take that as a no-pain-death, right Doc?”

“You will know it. I don’t want to scare you.”

“What’s death doctor? What is it like?”

“Death is the end of the physical being. Your soul survives.”

“And who am I? A face, these hands, my pancreas, this body? Or am I a soul, a spirit?”

“You are a spirit. Your heart stops functioning and you die, medically. Your spirit lives forever.”

“Keep my heart going; I don’t care about the spirit.”

“That’s impracticable”

“Make it possible”

“Are you threatening me?”


“Cheers to the new entrant in the club of The Immortal Beings. Finally, Death bows to thee too.”


Aimee Laine said...

I kept getting lost in the dialogue and having to go back and figure out who was talking. So I think I have a person and the grim reaper all the way through or does the 2nd voice switch to a doctor in the second part? And so then our person here become immortal? My question then becomes ... how?

Aniket Thakkar said...


I believe the doctor somehow managed to just keep the heart running and the second part was a flashback of sorts to the first, right?

Everyone keeps taking a go at the poor reaper. He's just doin' his job, you know. :)

The time jumps threw me off a little, but I like the concept. Always glad to see you here (and Klueless), pardner.

SzélsőFa said...

i see the same way as Aniket - the second part was a kind of flashback that happened before the first part, and the third part is the last part in the series of events.
so, in real time it happened like 2-1-3.

Unknown said...

I got a little lost, but figured out how you were writing it. Nice take on the prompt, certainly told differently.

Dottie :)

yamini said...

@Aimee: One becomes immortal when one decides!! :)
I experimented with varying timeframes in the same fiction.

@Aniket: The second was the flashback to the first. You are correct :)

@SzélsőFa: You got it pretty much right! 2-1-3 it is!

@Dottie: thanks :)

fairyhedgehog said...

Eternal life at any price, eh? I wonder what the Grim Reaper did in the end.

bluesugarpoet said...

I wonder what that doctor did with the soul price? Great use of flashback! ~Jana

Old Kitty said...

He laughs at the face of death!!! Excellent!! I think the Grim Reaper's met his match! Take care

Susan Ellis said...

I really like how dialogue, only dialogue, leads us through the whole story.

Michele Zugnoni said...

Hmm . . . intriguing concept. You explored multied aspects of the psyche; it was a juicy read.

Thank you for sharing!

Anonymous said...

Now here's a person who means business! Immortal beings, indeed. I especially liked the pacing.