Tuesday, June 27, 2006

Entry #47

Entry #47
by Roy


Far out. I was just talking to Rainbow and Moonbeam about the very idea--but after awhile I couldn't concentrate because Rainbow had a fly in her hair and Moonbeam was saying here use my hairbrush and brush it out, and Rainbow was all, hey I don't want to hurt it and Moonbeam was like, hey, it's a FLY, and Rainbow said well that's the trouble with you because you don't have strongly held BELIEFS like I do, and Moonbeam started crying and I was all SHUT U-UUUP!!!! and then because it was raining our VW bus slid off the side of the road and we drove sideways through the front window of a grocery store and knocked these Hostess cupcakes off their display and they were, like, everywhere, so we got out and ate a bunch of them before the cops came, and so that idea that the universe will take care of us, that was really heavy. I was just thinking about that.

So the cop is sitting at his desk with a cup of coffee and half of this dried out doughnut and says hey, we still had our one phone call, which I made. It was dark now, and the weather had gotten worse, and I could barely hear the guy, who is shouting, over the buzzing phone line, “What?? What??”

I say, oh yeah, and some of those cinnamon dessert stick things. I glance down at my jailer and say, better make that two orders.

7 comments:

Jaye Wells said...

First of all, that is the absolute best run-on sentence I have ever read. Second, thank you for the laugh.

Bhaswati said...

This was such fun to read. Thanks for sharing!

Fran Piper said...

Loved this one. Great humor, but just a little sad too.

JLB said...

This was great fun! I love "...so we got out and ate a bunch of them before the cops came, and so that idea that the universe will take care of us, that was really heavy."

Well done!

Lisa said...

I could hear this as I read it. Great job!

Elisha Bridges said...

This story made me glad to be alive!

Completely believable respresentation of what should be unbelievable.

I was THERE!

jason evans said...

Roy, congrats on fifth place!

Great exploration of character voice! Loved the cosmic cupcakes. Great example of deep third person POV. High marks overall.