Wednesday, January 03, 2007

Entry #1

Voices
by Wavemancali


The image of Jesus on the wall outside his window was talking to him again. Mike didn’t want to do the things the image told him but he was scared of the consequences. Hell was for eternity, and the people he killed went to heaven. Sometimes, when he was about to strike the killing blow, the voices would tell him to stop, that this time it was just another test of his faith.

Anna was overjoyed when she got permission from the building owner to do a mural on the side of hardware store. She had never worked on anything of this scale in the past, but she had faith in herself. She didn’t know how she was going to incorporate the wires that ran across the top half of the wall but then inspiration struck. There was just enough room above the wires to paint a couple of hands. She would make it a mural of a puppeteer controlling a marionette below and the wires would blend in with the other strings.

The alleyway beside the hardware store was dark and secluded. This was the part of the job Anna didn’t like. Tethered by the lines meant to keep her safe from a fall, she felt trapped in the narrow lane. A man was approaching her; he looked like he had been crying. His head was tilted a little to one side like he was listening to something but the alley was silent.

12 comments:

Jim said...

Whoo, very nice. Good setup and execution, plus a little blend of insanity and the supernatural mixed in there.

S. W. Vaughn said...

Oooh, tres creepy! Nice work!

Southern Writer said...

I love how you worked the wires into marionette strings. What a great idea.

Fran Piper said...

Creepy. Will the voices tell him to stop this time?

Anonymous said...

Waveman: Glad to see you found your way over here for this. Very nice entry.

:::the voices would tell him to stop, that this time it was just another test of his faith::::

REALLY liked that line.

BD

Dafath said...

another crucifixion

Jeff said...

Nice and creepy! Good job!

Anonymous said...

Very creepy and the reader anticipates the next part. Nicely done.

Anonymous said...

Thank you for all the comments, it makes for a very supportive writing inspiration.

Anonymous said...

Took the Jesus thing and ran. Nice

Anonymous said...

Oh creepy stuff - very nice!

jason evans said...

Very original idea to add the complexity of the two characers. The execution was very good. A high scorer!