Saturday, January 06, 2007

Entry #14

Another Sign
by Matt Dawdy


The assassin hovers near a shack, watching the road. Its snake-body is almost invisible; a vicious streak of blurred grey sent to kill somebody.

It could be for me. I finger the pistol in my pocket.

I make it by, huddled down in my hood, never so glad to be ignored, deciding once again to change my ways.

10 comments:

Joni said...

Wow, that opens up so much in just a few words. A quick strike. Nice.

Jim said...

Ditto what Joni said. This actually generated a couple of potential story ideas in my head.

Anonymous said...

Immediately suspenseful & the pace never let up!

Dafath said...

ah, jail cell conversions

Jeff said...

Good job with such an economy of words!

S. W. Vaughn said...

Short and sweet - packs a punch!

Anonymous said...

Wow! Economy of words or what!

Anonymous said...

Short and very punchy! Good job.

Anonymous said...

All of a sudden 250 words seems like incessant chatter, lol!

Well done!

jason evans said...

You evoke a great deal in these few words. Very vivid and well executed.