Nine on Nine
by Mayari
I live alone. I don't have a boyfriend or a family. The only company I had at home was this strange black cat who was already a resident of the apartment when I moved in. He had grey eyes and a weird mark on his right front paw. It was shaped like a moon. He would sleep by the window every night and he would watch me as I lay on the bed. I'd stare into his hypnotic grey eyes and I¢d fall asleep immediately.
But one day, he just suddenly vanished.
That was 9 months ago. Nine months of sleepless nights. I had gotten so used to those grey eyes that the night felt so empty without it.
It was after 5. And I walked home from work. I walked slowly to yet another sleepless night awaiting me.
I got to the corner of apartment 9 , my building. There was the familiar empty alley adjacent to it. But today, that alley wasn't empty. I come closer. Beside the smoky grey wall stood a familiar man. His hair was black as night. And as he lifted his right hand to comb his hair with his fingers, I saw a mark shaped like the moon.
I stood in front of him and he looked at me. I saw the most amazing grey eyes. They were so mesmerizing, that it was only a matter of seconds before I fainted into his arms and fell sound asleep.
Wednesday, January 10, 2007
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11 comments:
I apologize, Mayari! I've never had this happen before. Somehow I missed yours. It was definitely before the deadline, so I'm adding it now as a valid entry.
This has a mysterious dreamlike quality about it. Nice job!
Glad they were able to include this one. Nice story.
i liked the story and not because we had a black cat disappear 2 months ago.
i do think it would read better in 3rd person.
Has a nice fairy tale aspect to it.
Cool!
i enjoy this...thank you for giving it to us.
Nice job! Mysterious and slightly dreamlike.
Nice.
thanks, jason. no need for apologies. :)
and thanks for the sweet comments, everyone. i'm glad to be a part this contest. it's a great learning experience.
dafath, yes, i agree. i was rereading it one time and thought the same thing. thanks for the suggestion. :)
You developed the voice of character well. A nice sense of being lost came through.
Good marks overall.
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