Monday, July 30, 2007

Entry #40

Halo
by Alexander Salas


How I miss the warmness of the sun. I stand here surrounded by colossal trees. Their compact leaves form an umbrella. Inside the thickest of forests, darkness is my home. My banishment for as longs as I walk on God's green earth and only God, in his infinite wisdom, can end my life. His punishment I have learned to accept. His punishment I have grown to loathe.

Hidden in blackness, I stare at the halo. Light enters this timberland only at this point. The treetops construct a perfect circle. This is the most alluring place in my small world.

The ground basks in the glorious sunlight. Greener grass, livelier leaves and a warmer soil enjoy the halo's gift. Jealousy overtakes me as I look. It fills my heart with pure hatred.

Of course, by my own free will I could terminate my so called life. A simple visit under the halo would let the sun finish my cruel existence. It will be painful. And unlike the delightfulness of the sun's rays kissing one's skin on a beautiful summer day, I will burn to death.

I have walked this forest for hundreds of years. And for hundreds of years I have missed the sun. I am tired. The light is just a step away around this tree I stand behind. Frightened, I circle the tree and meet my fate.

13 comments:

Jaye Wells said...

Finally a vampire story. At first I thought this was a story about Cain after he was banished and marked. Either way, it's well done.

Beth said...

How I do adore vampire writing without all the sex and heaving breasts. Well, WELL done!

takoda said...

Two thumbs way up!

Katherine Napier said...

Somehow you managed to end the punishment with a sense of...redemption?...for me. A very enjoyable read, as death goes.

onipar said...

Nice read. I like how you worked in the halo in the picture.

Victor J. Banis said...

When I say I liked this, it's more of a compliment than you might think. I have sworn a vow that i will never read another vampire story, but you sucked me (pardon the expression) into this one.

SzélsőFa said...

I would have never wanted to read a vampire story and there you go.
Compelling.
-if getting killed by sunlight is a salvation, why is the vampire frightened?- Anyway, nicely written.

wrath999 said...

I think even if a human feels he is born again and saved, when the time comes he will be somewhat scared of the unknown. Maybe that is why he is frightened? Just my thought.

Absolute Vanilla (and Atyllah) said...

Compelling reading and very well handled. Really liked this one.

Anonymous said...

I didn't realize it was a vampire story until I hit the "hundred years". Very well done.

Betty Gordon

JLB said...

Very cool - it took me a minute, but I really enjoyed reading about the vampire's inner workings.

wrath999 said...

I juts want to thank everyone who commented on my story.

jason evans said...

I like how the protagonist thinks about how the sun will feel.