Wednesday, February 27, 2008

Entry #61

A New Beginning
by Lena Toporikova


“Because only with you I learned what happiness is. And with you I knew this solace and comfort”, he whispered.

Silence was the reply for him.

“Because you were there when I most needed you. And stood by me when I failed. And it gave me strength to stand up”, he smiled.

Only gentle wind touched his skin.

“Because you made me laugh every time I fell down. Your radiant smile was sunshine of my life”, he wept.

Only clouds were the witnesses of his tears.

“And now that you are gone I don’t see any reasons for holding on”. Tears rolled down his cheeks. All the pain he felt because of his loss, all his inconsolable grief longed to get out.

“Because only you gifted me with utter bliss. And you were my comfort and solace. And your peace was my peace, too”, the lonely tree rustled.

“Because I needed you more than you did. And your strength was my strength, too”, the wind whispered.

“Because I couldn’t bear you being down. And you were the sun to make me shine all through the hard times”, the clouds uttered.

“And now it is time to move on. Time for a new beginning. I know you can do it… for me.”

Tears rolled down his cheeks but he knew he would hold on. Just for her.

12 comments:

Aerin said...

There's a spiritual quality to this, in the way that the clouds and the wind and the sun take up his pain, almost helping him to bear it. Bittersweet, but nicely done.

BernardL said...

Poetic.

Sarah Hina said...

Very uplifting. I loved all of the natural elements buttressing him, and comforting him in his grief. Great weaving of the "Whispers" theme here.

Lovely, lyrical piece of writing.

Absolute Vanilla (& Atyllah) said...

What an evocative and lyrical piece of writing, Lena - it's beautifully done, weaving and interconnecting all the parts of the whole. Very special piece of writing.

paisley said...

very beautifully told.. thank you...

*~*Sameera*~* said...

Very well written there.Love and sorrow intervened with nature,absolutely wonderful!Good luck! :)

SzélsőFa said...

I like how the elements (or some higher spirits behind) seem to be comforting him. I like the hope at the end. Very spiritual.

bluesugarpoet said...

Touching!

Rob said...

Well done! Loved how you showed his connection to everything around him.

Lena said...

thank you to all the supportive comments. Was really important for me to get some feedback! :)

jason evans said...

It reads like a prayer. Poignant. The message carried in the voice of nature. Well done.

Aine said...

The loss of a soulmate-- so poetic and heartbreaking. I like the way you used nature to give her a voice.