Tuesday, January 13, 2009

Entry #82

Jade’s Ascension
by Bobbi Rightmyer


Jade looked at the worn journal with envy and awe. Ten years of observations - it couldn’t possibly be over, could it? She knew today would eventually come, but she was not ready for the swiftness, or the emotions choking through her brain.

For 10 years now, she knew this would be the final year. No more friendship, no more love, no more anything on this third rock from the Sun. Ten years, this was all she had been given. At the time Jade made the deal, 10 years seemed like an eternity, but it had passed in the blink of an eye.

How could she leave her new home? How could she survive the rest of her life without the new friends, new love she had found on this alien planet?

Jade’s eyes filled with tears as she picked up the journal and bid her new life goodbye. It was 3 am and she stood in the empty mall, remembering how strange this place had seemed on her first visit. As she started up the silent escalator, she wondered if Earth would ever be the same.

Although the Earthlings had never truly accepted her pale green skin or her black almond eyes, she had no trouble fitting in when dressed in blue jeans and a button down shirt. Standing on a step near the middle of the escalator, Jade waited for the transmission that would send her home - the transmission that would end all life on Earth.

10 comments:

J.C. Montgomery said...

So bittersweet. So...human.

JR's Thumbprints said...

I've been searching for an escalator story that leads to a spaceship. This just might very well be the one.

Bobbi said...

Thanks J.C.! Thanks JR!

Lena said...

i so felt sad for her :(
guess we should think twice before making any deals!
Nicely done :)

*~*{Sameera}*~* said...

That was sad :(

Nice,unique take!

BernardL said...

Well written.

Sarah Hina said...

Bittersweet story, Bobbi. I felt her longing and regret.

Strong writing, and unique interpretation. Good job! :)

Catvibe said...

I enjoyed the story and your writing is very good. I thought it was kind of cute that your character, Jade, was green. :-) I'm sorry she'll have to leave, I would have liked to hear of her perceptions of us Earthlings...perhaps you will take it further?

September said...

very nicely written, sweet,
I wish I could go with her.

jason evans said...

Great job on pacing and voice!

Thanks for being a wonderful part of the contest!