Sunday, January 10, 2010

Entry #102

Man in Her Dream
by Barbara L. Gunn

One morning Kate woke to the sound of a phone ringing. A man with a very pleasant voice said, “Good morning, I hope I didn’t wake you.”

“You did”, she answered, “but it was time for me to get up anyway.”

“I am the spirit that guided you to where you are today”, the man said.

“No way!” she replied. “Spirits can’t make phone calls to humans.”

“They can if God makes it possible”, he countered.

“I have not felt your presence for some time I thought you were gone”, she said.

“Not gone, proudly watching you finish the job of becoming who you really are. There is only so much a guide can do”, he added laughing.

“I am grateful to have this opportunity to thank you for helping me grow. I sincerely hope you have been rewarded for your hard work”, Kate replied.

“Reward is the reason for this call. Our Creator has instructed me to tell you that your time for harvest has arrived. As a reward for your hard work and willingness to take every opportunity offered to align with your soul anything you desire is yours for the asking. The only question is- will you allow you to accept this reward?”

After a few moments of silence he repeated the question adding, “God is waiting for your answer.”

Taking a deep breath Kate’s enthusiastic response was, “Yes!”

Wouldn’t it be nice if the dream were real, Kate thought as she slowly woke up for real?


Ayodele Morocco-Clarke said...

Awwwwww...I approached the ending with trepidation, wondering if you might slot a twist in there. Good job.

pjd said...

Barbara, do people regularly call you a tease?

Frankly, if someone called me and told me he was the spirit that guided me this far, I'd hang up. Or expect him to try to get me to refinance my house. Or both.

JaneyV said...

Oh Barbara - if only!

I love the originality of this. The idea that God is waiting for your answer instead of the reverse is so cool.

Thanks for giving me a smile on this freezing cold day.

Craig said...

A well thought out and clever piece. Well done.

lena said...

Aww... I so hoped she will get what she worked so hard for. Too bad dreams are... well, just dreams.

Well done :)

Bernita said...

Guardian spirit as a cold-call salesman.
you may have already won a free cell phone/a million dollars/vacuum cleaner

Scribblers Inc said...

that is a take which made me think...what if!!

Mithun Mukherjee.

Kartik said...

Hmm, good things never come your way that easy, don't they?! I'm glad it was just a dream.

kashers said...

Tickled me to think whether he was calling from a call centre. Amusing take.

Aniket said...

Dayum... I hate those trick questions. :)

Hate those alarms too... I almost kissed Catherine Zeta Jones one day. *sigh*

laughingwolf said...

dream on, kate!

austere said...

Well, I wish...

Taken aback a bit by the lack of surprise/ shock etc.

Laurel said...

Interesting take on spiritual exploration. Quite a wake-up call, that dream!

Four Dinners said...

We need our windows changing...I'm expecting a call from my guardian angel shortly!...;-)

Great twist at the end. You are indeed a tease!!!!

We also need more humoour here. Than you for supplying some!

illyriataylor said...

deals like that should always be turned down!

james r. tomlinson said...

Ah yes, jump-cut from the dream sequence to reality. I detected a slight bit of disappointment in your narrators awakening.

Chris Eldin said...

What JaneyV said.
I wonder what she would've asked for...

catvibe said...

Sweet idea! Wishing for such a call...

Aerin said...

my caveat

Something I Would Keep

Something I Might Tweak

Dear Entrants #1-105,

I have read your pieces so that I can fairly participate in the Readers' Choice vote. (I read all of them through last week, before I started commenting.) I will be coming back around to offer my keep/tweak comment, but I didn't want anyone to snark.

Aerin (#236)

BTW, it's perfectly fine if you still want to snark, but this way you can choose a more appropriate subject, like the Golden Globes or those wretched Old Navy dummies.