Monday, January 11, 2010

Entry #119

Into The Night
by Cathi Stoler


She’d always loved the night. The velvety feel of it on her skin. The way it flowed over her like the softest cashmere shawl.

Tonight was no exception. The full moon cast its light past her shoulder, it’s glow igniting the mica imbedded in the sidewalk giving it the sparkle of diamonds waiting to be gathered up by the armful.

She walked along the quiet street in the moonlight’s path, her footsteps leaving a soft echo that trailed behind with each stride she took. Deeper and deeper she went into the night, absorbed in its delicious feel.

A flutter of wings from above caught her attention—a crow landing on the streetlight a few yards ahead. It tilted its head toward her, eyes bright in the light from the lamp, beak pointed downward as if to say, “Who are you and why are you here?”

She looked up, her head matching the angle of the bird’s exactly and smiled. “We can share it, you know,” she whispered as she passed by.

As if he’d understood—but didn’t like it—the bird cawed once and ruffled his feathers. Then he stretched his wings in a flowing arc, settled back and tucked his head down preparing for sleep.

She was laughing as the man came up and kissed her on the cheek.

“What’s so funny,” he asked, taking her arm.

“I think I just met someone who loves the night as much as I do.”


(Cathi Stoler was an award-winning advertising copywriter for many years. Wanting to fulfill her ambition to write full-length mystery novels, she turned her talents to this genre and wrote Keeping Secrets, a mystery/suspense story that delves into the subject of hidden identity. It was followed by, Telling Lies, which reprises several of her main characters and takes on the subject of stolen Nazi art. Both of these novels were named as finalists in the Brighid’s Fire Books fiction contest. Cathi is working on the third book in the series, The Hard Way. She is a member of the New York Chapter of Sisters in Crime and posts regularly on the womenofmystery.net blog. Cathi has studied both Italian and Glass Blowing, which she hopes to incorporate into future novels. She lives with her husband in Manhattan.)

27 comments:

Tessa said...

Beautiful writing - with a wonderful rhythmic cadence and superb imagery. I could picture it all vividly. Definitely one of my favs!

Mayur said...

I can almost picturise the crow holding up a 'trespassers will be prosecuted' placard next morning! great character portrayal, i love this one :).

Bernita said...

My logical mind balks at an "armfull" of diamonds, demanding handfuls instead, but this is charming, particularly her mimic of the crow's head gesture.

wrath999 said...

Great first paragraph. You paint a great picture

Rohan said...

i loved it.

onipar... said...

Beautiful. Great atmosphere, and I love the character.

Aniket said...

I'm so sorry, but I forgot all about the piece as soon as I read the 'Sisters in Crime' part in your bio. Well, its a guy thing, you know. Blessed with imagination. :D

On a serious note, I too share the love for night. Its silence, its peace, its clarity...
There's something pure about it. Loved the piece.

Lena said...

Great imagery, very strong writing, this piece has everything a reader would want to in it.

Tara said...

You've painted a beautiful picture with this.

Terrie Farley Moran said...

Beautifully done.

Four Dinners said...

oh eck...me top 5 was at 14...now it's at 15....

This is great writing methinks.

I also love the imagery of her tilting her head to match the crows.

If you write like this in your published books I'd better hop over to Amazon!

Kathleen A. Ryan said...

Nicely done, Cathi! You painted a vivid picture.
So glad you entered Jason's contest!

pjd said...

Charming is a good word, but "comfortable" is how this feels to me. Smooth and easy. Nicely done.

austere said...

Loved the imagery in the first few lines.
Then I kept waiting for drama, but this was nice.

laughingwolf said...

smooth as black velvet...

Laurel said...

Great description! I can absolutely smell that hotel room and his desperation is gripping.

Deb Smythe said...

Beautifully descriptive. Nice job.

Kartik said...

Lovely imagery and very velvety smooth!

catvibe said...

What a lovely walk, and I love that she communicates with crows. Very nice writing, sparkles like the street diamonds in the moon.

Betty Gordon said...

Wonderful imagery and well written.

Betty Gordon

Craig said...

This piece really paints a picture of freedom without having to try too hard. Marvelous.

McKoala said...

Distinctly superior description and scene-setting.

JaneyV said...

Your descriptions of the night were luxurious. I wanted to wrap myself up in them.

Gorgeous feel to this.

james r. tomlinson said...

I like everything in this story except the title. For whatever reason I can't get Archie Bunker out of my head.

Chris Eldin said...

I love the understanding night creatures hold with one another. Evocative descriptions, and truly lovely writing.

Aerin said...



my caveat

Something I Would Keep

First paragraph sets the consistent lovely, comfortable tone.

Something I Might Tweak

Second paragraph - "it's glow" should read "its glow" - no apostrophe if it's possessive.

Kathleen said...

Congrats on achieving "The Forties Club" status, Cathi! That's wonderful! I voted for your story, I think it's terrific!