Nature Is Cruel
by David Barber
I watch you circling, your beauty and elegance gliding with ease on the uplift of cold winter air. The crows harass you, attacking you in two’s and three’s, trying to ruin your flight, but you take no notice. You could take them easily with your razor sharp talons, your strength and your split second timing. You are an aerial warrior, a gladiator of the skies.
But, today, you are no match for me. I plummet from high above, reaching speeds that you could only dream of. The bird watchers, busy getting their cameras and tripods ready, would think this to be something to behold; a peregrine falcon attacking another bird of prey, especially a large buzzard. But they are wrong.
Pushing speeds of three hundred kilometres an hour, I reach you within seconds, my talons splaying at the very last second. I hit the crow, claws first. It was coming in on your blind side, but is now falling to the earth, its neck broken and bleeding.
I would never attack you. Again, I have protected you and I will continue to do so. I will continue to love you also, yet nature is cruel and will never allow us to be together.
Friday, January 08, 2010
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38 comments:
Ah love, in another unrequited form. Well done.
Arise, fair sun, and kill the envious moon!
I especially like the description of the audience.
"a gladiator of the skies" loved that line and the image it promotes. Great piece Dave.
A most unusual love story!
lovely images!
Great imagery and voice. Very well done
Quite lovely with strong images.
Thanks people. It's not what I normally write, but I was pleased with the outcome.
Regards, David.
It took me a few moments to switch gears. Like you said, not your normal style.
I really loved it though! I'm a sucker for a 'love that can never be' type of story.
I enjoyed this. Well done David!
((Hugs))
Laura
Great twist on the image David. But why is it crows always get the bad press? I think Blue Jays are the avian version of trailer trash.
Man, didn't this big pool draw a lot of swimmers this time?
David I think your love story is incredibly touching. Thank you for that.
The forbidden fruit is always the sweetest. :)
Liked the end a lot.
That was pure poetry, David. You went outside your box and it paid off in a major way. Congratulations!
Interesting love story. Very moving.
Oh! Be together! Be together!
Thanks for your comments. I really appreciate them.
regards, David.
Nice take.
Lovely! In love but cannot be together. Damn the laws of man and/or nature. :(
Well done, David. Well done.
Love knows no bounds!
Beautifully written David. Great stuff.
This is a tightly written piece. Good economy of words and fine descriptive voice. Just the right tone and air, Nicely done.
The Falcon who loved the Buzzard. It's almost like beauty and the beast but turned around! I love it!
Great story, glad the crow bought it. Damn things creep me out.
love does take many forms...
Yes, nature is cruel. As can be love.
Such beautiful imagery...
The Romeo and Juliet of the feathered set.
I like the visual of the dive and the crow being struck...very powerful!
Thanks to everyone for commenting.
Nicely done, David!
I so understand this. The impossibility of some love.
Especially when you're a hawk. I mean, a girl has to eat.
Creative and charming, and well written! We used to live in the Emirates, where the falcon is revered. Nicely captured.
Laurel said it first: avian Romeo and Juliet.
There is nothing so protective as the power of love, even unrequited, or perhaps that should be, 'especially when' unrequited.
Very nicely told.
Your perspective on this piece rocks, David. I could feel the wind on my face as I read it.
I love this perspective on impossible love
I watch this event often in my neighborhood - the crows dive bombing the hawks, who absolutely are aerial warrior, a gladiator of the skies - excellent rendition.
I love the voice in this story.
And I love that it's a love story :)
The switch from omnipotent narrator to first person was troubling.
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