I'm like magma
pulsing
pulsing with heights
and long long earthquakes
and incineration
like magma
pulsing
under the weight
of a cold ocean
turning
swelling
pushing hot fault lines
and majestic
carved mountains
like magma
bulging
under a boiling ocean
and you breathe
your fast breaths
in the steam
12 comments:
Intense.
Love it!
This was very powerful. :)
A burning desire put in wonderful words!!
Carrie, Meghan, Oddyoddyo13, and Chatterbox, the brave commenters! I wanted to capture a rawness here. And a driving force with the repetition. I had fun with the photo too. It's foam just before the drop at Niagara Falls.
Oh, I liked this, Jason!
(the photo is of water?? wow...)
You have such a wonderful way with words. This sums up exactly how I feel when I'm about to explode in temper.
"long, long, earthquakes..."
My favourite line.
Um. Yes. Hot and heavy... quite right, I wasn't brave enough to be one of the first to comment :)
Raine, great to see you! This one is up your alley, no?
Petty Witter, oh, I love that! A different read than I intended, but perfect.
Bernita, I thought that line really fit.
Terri, wow, you slipped in there as I was hitting publish. I totally understand not wanting to be first! I glad I took a shot at describing driving desire, though.
I don't know how I missed this one. Wow. Just wow!
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