Monday, May 24, 2010

The Wait Too Long

I'm like magma
pulsing with heights
and long long earthquakes
and incineration
like magma
under the weight
of a cold ocean
pushing hot fault lines
and majestic
carved mountains
like magma
under a boiling ocean
and you breathe
your fast breaths
in the steam


Carrie said...


Meghan said...

Love it!

Oddyoddyo13 said...

This was very powerful. :)

Chatterbox said...

A burning desire put in wonderful words!!

jason evans said...

Carrie, Meghan, Oddyoddyo13, and Chatterbox, the brave commenters! I wanted to capture a rawness here. And a driving force with the repetition. I had fun with the photo too. It's foam just before the drop at Niagara Falls.

raine said...

Oh, I liked this, Jason!
(the photo is of water?? wow...)

....Petty Witter said...

You have such a wonderful way with words. This sums up exactly how I feel when I'm about to explode in temper.

Bernita said...

"long, long, earthquakes..."
My favourite line.

Terri said...

Um. Yes. Hot and heavy... quite right, I wasn't brave enough to be one of the first to comment :)

jason evans said...

Raine, great to see you! This one is up your alley, no?

Petty Witter, oh, I love that! A different read than I intended, but perfect.

Bernita, I thought that line really fit.

jason evans said...

Terri, wow, you slipped in there as I was hitting publish. I totally understand not wanting to be first! I glad I took a shot at describing driving desire, though.

Karen said...

I don't know how I missed this one. Wow. Just wow!