Monday, November 15, 2010

Unhindered



he could worship her
operate
micro-cellular
leap
before he looks
tune himself
to a molecular
flaming tip
and kiss
a homicide
to her
(screaming to be saved)
modesty

7 comments:

the walking man said...

Turn your back when she has to use the bush. Save her modesty and look another day for the places where the flame kisses.

Shadow said...

very interesting combination words here, not sure i would have ended in modesty though, good thing that is too.

Oddyoddyo13 said...

That was pretty intense...I liked how all the random phrases fit together. :)

jason evans said...

Walking Man, that is sage advice.

Shadow, a curious one, yes.

Oddyoddyo13, piece of a strange puzzle, perhaps.

Bebo said...

Oh I like this! Like his intensity of emotion
..."and kiss a homicide to her"...
And her reticence "(screaming to be saved) modesty"

well done!

Karen said...

Oh, nice one, Jason!

jason evans said...

Bebo, sometimes I like to pare down poetry this far to bring out a pure thread of thought. I don't think they're popular with everyone, though. But glad you felt it!

Karen, thank! Sometimes feelings cut through like a line of few words.