Hubris...
by Laughingwolf
i sit astride the '53 hardtail panhead chopper as it throbs thunderously 'tween my thighs, the wind whips wild hair from a fevered brow, leathers flap against bare skin
we approach 120 mph on the tar-smooth blacktop
tendrils of joy perc to the surface of my addled brain, i scream it into the ether:
'yeah, ya sumbitches!
'baddest of all badasses!
'live to ride, ride to live!
'outta mah way, muthafukkahs!
'eeeehawwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww!'
we catch, and leave stupefied in our wake, some dorky dude and his lame-ass family duddering along in the constricting cage of their hummer, while we ride free
my contemptuous laugh soars above the bike's roar, to add insult to their utter humiliation
fuck!
i'm da king!
without warning, the park grass rises to smack me upside the head
helmet askew, i open my eyes and spit dendritis, as blood seeps from a split lip
i see my honda elite 80 on its side, still purring softly
i limp over to retrieve my bike, and burble off... to catcalls and raucous laughter
i'd daydreamed myself into another fantasy
Wednesday, July 16, 2008
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31 comments:
"still purring softly" - I like that. Glad that bike and man are ok.
thank you, september :)
Hey, some of those scooters go pretty fast. Not 120 maybe.
Pretty funny stuff.
I used to have a Suzuki 75, so the kid had me beat by 5hp! That was a nice switcheroo you pulled on us there.
Yeah, I had a Suzuki 50 which was small than the Honda 70 Trailhopper (or was it a trailblazer?).
"i'd daydreamed myself into another fantasy"
For me? Words to live by....
Great story!
Energetic tale.
thx all, greatly appreciated :)
What's life without a daydream. I love his foul-mouthed internal dialogue, really ripping up the biker fantasy. The end got me - loved it!
Great piece LW - really enjoyed it!
i had a lotta fun with it, too... thx janey :)
Ha! You got in the moped gag that I couldn't fit into my story! Nice work. I was slightly confused by the 'Elite 80' reference (they don't sell them in the UK as far as I know), but I soon clicked.........
Excellent piece.
thx bro... glad it became clear and you enjoyed it ;)
Endearing and funny!
I truly enjoyed reading this one. Very well done!
I loved this one. Your writing is so vibrant and realistic. I could see this guy with his string of curses and raised middle finger to the conventional world.
Maybe he'll get there someday. ;)
Brilliant job!
thx chris and sarah, glad you enjoyed it :)
Dude, that was me back in the day. You totally captured it. Fun!
lol thx missy :)
Lw, this is great!
The eternal daydream - even a little girl in mommie's high heels is dreaming a form of it.
Loved the internal dialogue.
Well done!
thank you, bernita... praise indeed :)
Daydreams are good… Your words captured well the high and the low.
Excellent last line! (I do that all the time...) :-)
This was set up so well. I was sort of dreading...er, expecting...a he-got-smashed-to-bloody-bits ending. Yay for twists! This is just a really fun piece overall.
vesper and aerin, thx so much for your kind comments :)
Nice Mitty-esque homage.
thx poso :)
ha ha ha ha ha ha ha wonderful
thx bud, appreciate your comment :)
Glad he was safe :)
Liked his spirit.Well written!
sameera, thank you :)
Love those "Walter Mitty" moments!
Good writing skills. Nice ending.
thank you, klgilbert... seems google at my earlier reply :(
Whoa. Embarrassing. He can claim that he meant to do that. Nice cut to the reality. You handled that well.
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