Wednesday, January 10, 2007

Entry #39

Starting Over
by Margaret Ann Magle


Eva stared out the window at the stark grey wall across the alley. She only half listened as the realtor droned on behind her: new shower - energy saving furnace - laundry in the basement. The woman's voice was as bleak as the building outside. It was only when Eva heard the words 'twenty-four hour security' did she pay attention.

Over the past few months, feeling secure had become Eva's mantra. Detective Moore, or David as he preferred Eva call him, had pounded that need into her head. It was still hard to believe that a farm girl from Nowhere, Wisconsin would be on a first name basis with detectives, judges, and federal prosecutors. But that was a lifetime ago.

As more details about a charming one bedroom, fully furnished, newly painted, blah, blah, blah echoed in her ears, a lone pigeon flew toward the window and gently perched on the sill. Eva watched as the bird bobbed its head up and down pecking at unseen seeds or insects. Eva reached out her hand and placed it on the window so only a thin piece of glass separated her from the bird. There was no fear in the bird's eyes as it turned and stared at Eva. Eva stared back.

"If you have no questions," the realtor asked behind her, "would you like to come to my office and sign the lease?"

Eva couldn't tear herself away from the bird.

"Miss? Miss?"

"It's Ms." Eva replied with a smile, "Ms. Jacky Cross."

10 comments:

Jim said...

Witness protection program?

Fran Piper said...

Nice. I liked the contrast between Eva and the bird.

Joni said...

I really like this. The pacing is great and the images are strong. Two thumbs up.

Jeff said...

I agree with Joni. Nice pacing and imagery. Good job!

Anonymous said...

I like that birdcage feeling set up by the pigeon and the character being put together like that.

caveblogem said...

I have always hated pigeons, but you seem to have found a use for one. Nice story.

Anonymous said...

I liked the bigger story surrounding this piece.

S. W. Vaughn said...

Well told!

Anonymous said...

Some very powerful and evocative imagery.

jason evans said...

Nice character study here. An effective painting of the subtleties. Would make a great beginning for something larger.

High marks overall.