Olaf’s Big Adventure
by Posolxstvo
Olaf froze as the shadow on the ground rapidly approached and passed over, swooping away into the loaming. Scanning the sky, he couldn’t see anything standing out against the murky clouds, but let’s face it – he was a domesticated rabbit. What the hell was he looking for anyway?
“Shit like this always happens to me,” he muttered, dashing for the nearest available ground cover, scanning for shadows. “I should have stayed where I was. But, noooo, I had to see what lay beyond the open door. Damn damn damn!”
Under a bush, he rested his aching side, still bruised from the four foot drop out of his hutch. He could hear the hawk’s shrill cry, but still couldn’t see anything.
“I’ll just hang out till it’s safe,” he gasped to himself.
“Like hell you will,” replied an unfriendly voice belonging to a rather unpleasant looking groundhog. “Get your own damn hiding place, housepet.”
“But…” he stammered.
“But nothing. Clear out. And if you get eaten, try not to let that beast shit all over the rest of us.” The groundhog pushed him out.
Olaf was once again in the open. He could hear the hawk again. He took off in what he thought was the other direction, mindlessly dashing this way and that.
And that’s when he felt himself being picked up off the ground. “Hey,” called a human sounding voice. “Here he is.”
Olaf had never been so happy to see that snot nosed little brat.
Wednesday, November 14, 2007
Subscribe to:
Post Comments (Atom)
12 comments:
Oh, cute!
Wonderful and unexpected ending.
Very cute. I was worried you were going to break our hearts.
Rabbit gone bad.
Very cute!
LOL!
Loved that last line, and the whole concept. I guess kids are marginally preferable to hawks. ;)
Very whimsical, funny tale. Good job!
Very unique and very well written
What a lovely story.
I like the hedgehog's character :)
If not for the cursing, this would be positively cute. How funny!
Wonderful. At or near the top of my writers choice. I may be biased by memories of a rabbit and love unsung after so many years. But who could fail to find favor for a rabbit's terrified heartbeat? Ava
Thanks for the kind feedback. As a first time contest enterer, I very much appreciate it.
And sorry about the cursing. I guess. I can't help how my characters were raised ;).
Oh, I loved this! Thank you!
Cute ending. When rabbits run like that, they're usually done for. Lucky guy indeed! I also liked the grumbling animals.
Post a Comment