Wednesday, November 14, 2007

Entry #48

Looking Back on the Road Ahead
by Missy Vinson

The clouds were woven like lace as the sun rose below; a brightening sky peeking through the threads. Ella thought cloudy-on-the-verge-of-clearing was far more perfect than your standard bright-and-cheerful. It hinted of mystery.

Ella was hopeful that Ash would not disappoint her with the usual tardiness, anxious to spend the next year more than a thousand miles from parents and sisters. Ash’s parents owned a two-bedroom rental near A&M, so Ella would pay less than the dorm and even have her own bathroom! Texas was not her first choice for school, but Far Away certainly was.

The SUV pulled up hesitantly, the rear-passenger door flying open instantly. Ash bounded out carrying more than she could lift almost falling into Ella’s open hatchback. Ash’s mom hopped out, puffy eyes revealing her heartbreak. Ella ran up to greet her with a big hug, while Ash continued to unload bags. Mrs. Collins shuddered, and tears began to flow. Would her mother be as heartbroken?

With perfect timing, Ella’s family spilled out of their house to say goodbye. Her mom and dad were dry-eyed and stoic, while her sisters were beyond tears long before today. Ella suspected her mom would join Mrs. Collins soon after they drove away.

After hugs and goodbyes, Ella took a deep breath and hit the gas. The waving crowd behind her shrank quickly to nothing as the cloudy veil above pulled away to reveal the road ahead. The mystery of leaving home no longer seemed so enticing.


Sarah Hina said...

Great last line, and so true. Far Away is always less enticing as we get further from home.

Very realistic portrait. Well done!

Missy said...

Sara, you are so kind. I notice that you read and shared a positive thought for each story here that I have read so far. Thank you.

Beth said...

What I like most about this is how authentic it is ... it isn't put on or fantasy, it feels real. I like different genres, but I'm a bigger fan of things I read and can say, "This has happened." I felt that with this one.

Kansas Bob said...

Very nice Missy.. I agree with Beth about it's authenticity.. sorry I didn't get here a bit sooner.

pearlie said...

I like it :) and a very poignant last line. I wish I never have to leave home, but then again I hope I am heading "home".

Thanks Missy for sharing your talent.

jason evans said...

I liked the realization that going wasn't nearly as cool as she thought it would be. I wonder if she regains the wonder a few days later, however.