Tuesday, February 26, 2008

Entry #53

Her Arms Reach For The Sky
by Nothingman


I still remember how she screamed when I started to chop her. Her begging sobs changed to vile curses and then to animal shrieks. I’d have gone deaf if I didn’t have my iPod with me!

Good for me there was no one else in the forest when I killed. I took my time, from pieces to chunks and then to tiny tiny bits, till she was all mushy goo. I dug a hole near the tree and poured her in. It’s a good comforting feeling to know that she is dead now. Chopped, minced and buried under that tree.

Last summer I took our Kathy on a picnic to that place. I ‘watered’ the tree, but hey, I never told you this ok! Though, I must admit it felt peaceful, in more ways than one.

I saw the tree, its branches all raped dead by winter, naked and withered, reaching out for the sky like arms of some anorexic monster.

Some days, I think I can still hear her screams in the wind, but maybe I just need some new ear buds for my iPod.


[The writer is currently fighting a new job, life and the forces of darkness all while trying to keep two blogs A Story A Day and Poetry well-fed and cared for. So far, he is winning over life, how long remains to be seen.]

17 comments:

Remiman said...

The tree remains a stark reminder of the deed well described.
Perhaps a tinkling of stories to come?
rel

Beth said...

These contests are usually the only time I read this type of story. You've just given me a nightmare for sure.

Sarah Hina said...

Brutally vivid, Nothingman, yet macabrely funny, too. Your voice here is dark and strong, and you spare no detail or feeling.

Bold, original story, but I hope someone pees on that guy someday. ;)

Precie said...

Wow, that's vividly harsh. Talk about a strong voice!

Bernita said...

Exactly what Sara said!

ChristineEldin said...

Creepy and funny! Can't picture this one too long....

JLB said...

Nicely-crafted metaphors. Brutal, but nice.

Therese said...

Ewwwww! "Poured her in"! Ewwwww!

Anything that gets a strong reaction is good. I like the 'raped branches'. It makes you feel like you're in the mind of the killer.

Well done.

Aerin said...

The iPod references made me think of the PC/Mac commercials and how they would tell this story! I think it was because the narrator is so light about this very dark, terrible act. Effective juxtaposition of the two.

SzélsőFa said...

Ouch, another self-possessed brutal killer in this contest!
I like how the tree's barren arms is positioned as if they were the woman's.
(Did he pee on the tree before he buried the 'mush' or back last year?)

wrath999 said...

Very creepy with a bit of humor. I like that he "watered' the tree!

Absolute Vanilla (& Atyllah) said...

A classic piece of Nothingman writing! Vivid brutality with a deft twist of black humour.

puresunshine said...

very well chopped story!

bluesugarpoet said...

I love how you dive right into the brutality with the first line. Creepy indeed; ingeniously, the chopper is evilly detached.

Rob said...

I'm a sucker for the deranged, so I enjoyed this one. Great description of the tree.

jason evans said...

The IPod was a great element. It gave this murder story a very contemporary feel. Nice touch.

Aine said...

Yikes-- is there any shred of humanity in him? The comment about "watering" the tree is disturbing, yet strangely humorous.

Perhaps he'll die of dehydration and dessication. I wouldn't want his remains to nourish any living thing!