Wednesday, February 27, 2008

Entry #71

The Father
by Wuff Al


The contraction came again. Elise tried pushing the baby out. George looked worried sick. All he could do was to hold her hand and his nerves, and whisper, “I love you!” The doctor encouraged Elise to keep trying.

Seconds later, the baby saw light at the end of the tunnel. With the last ounce of energy, Elise released the baby completely. George was relieved and overjoyed.

“Congratulations! Would you like to do the honours?” the doctor said, handing George a pair of scissors. With a shaken hand, the father cut the umbilical cord. He was then ushered out of the room with the baby on the trolley. He spent time observing his cute little offspring.

“Mine, mine…this is what I’ve always wanted,” he thought as he began to embrace fatherhood.

As soon as he sat, Xabi walked in and whispered into his ear, “We’ve got the mole.” George left his son with the nurse, and led the way to his limo. There, sitting in the middle of the car was a nervous Antonio who was tied up and gagged. He sat next to him and closed the door.

“Can I trust you, Antonio? You’ve got me busted at Bogota, you bastard!” George whispered. He took out a dagger and slit Antonio’s throat swiftly.

He stepped out of the car and drew a deep breath. He noticed a lone tree across the field next to the hospital.

“I want a house for my boy over there. Remove the tree, Xabi!”

16 comments:

Mystico said...

Oh dear. The loving father contrasts with the gangster, but we see more of the "tough" part towards the end. I feel sorry for that tree.

paisley said...

there is a bit of softness in everyone.. you just need to know where to look...this was very nice...

JaneyV said...

The humanity of the monster! Nice touch ordering the execution of the tree. The murder of a traitor, however gruesome, is at least understandable.

The destruction of the innocent tree - now that 's just evil!

Absolute Vanilla (& Atyllah) said...

What an interesting, disturbing and gripping juxtaposition of feelings and behaviour. So typically human. A dramatic and deeply effective piece of writing, really well done!

Beth said...

Tough and tender.

Sarah Hina said...

This is a man who's used to getting what he wants. I loved the interplay between his heartlessness and his hope.

Strong writing here! Enjoyed it. :)

Aerin said...

I was concerned at first with the way the mother seemed to be discarded, but as the story progressed, I realized it fit the character so well. I want my own Xabi...

wrath999 said...

The good and evil of one man defined clearly and in such a short amount of words

SzélsőFa said...

It feels like a scene from the Godfather series.
I was shocked by the death order upon that tree. Perhaps Antonio was just as much innocent as that tree....?

Rob said...

I love that you hacked down the tree. Great twist on the topic.

Terri said...

And just when we were ready to go aawww... you went and veered off in a completely different direction. Clever!

anna said...

Very creepy and ruthless. Great characterization for 250 words!

bluesugarpoet said...

Nice plot twist!

Wuff Al said...

I really am pleasantly surprised by the positive comments you nice people gave me here. I hope to come back for more exposure. Thank you, Everyone!

jason evans said...

Very unique take on the photo. The tenderness is juxtaposed nicely against the brutality. Well done.

Aine said...

Something tells me that kid will be spoiled. Embracing fatherhood is more about George's needs than those of the child.

Sadly, this isn't far from truth for some people.