Monday, July 14, 2008

Entry #31

Losing Freedom
by Millie


She looked at her husband lying on the sofa smoking a joint and watching Top Gear.

She was happy with him, loved him dearly, desperately.

He wasn’t aware she was studying him and was commenting on the TV, she smiled and nodded and looked back to the screen.

They’d been together six years, all good years, full of love, excitement, spontaneity, companionship….they really were meant to be.

He was the first man who had ever really < i >been there< /i > for her, throughout everything, no ifs buts or maybes; he was just there holding her hand helping her through whatever they might be facing together.

He loved their life together.
They had decent jobs, enough to pay the bills with a little left for a social life, they couldn’t always afford holidays but they could always afford to do
< i >something.< /i >

She’d lost count of the many weekends they’d jumped on his bike and just disappeared somewhere, the beaches they’d lain on getting high with nothing but each other for entertainment.

When the baby was born they would be trapped. Together because they had to be instead of the way it had always been, together because they needed to be.

He looked at her and smiled, the smile that showed he was hers forever, and then he reached over and put his hand on her belly the smile becoming ever wider as the baby kicked.

Maybe things would be ok after all…

14 comments:

*~*{Sameera}*~* said...

Awww so beautiful :)

Such kind of love always tugs at the heart.Freedom is more of an attitude at times than a state.

Lovely description!

Beth said...

Such a nice tale. Love is a good thing!

Sarah Hina said...

I liked how her trepidation was eased by his smile and touch. Very sweet.

It is true that so much changes with having children. But hopefully their love will grow stronger, and richer.

Nicely told!

Millie said...

Thanks for the comments guys, this is the first time i have ever tried to write anything and now i dont feel like i was wasting my time!
Thanks!

Wannabe Writer said...

Nice...-Rita

JaneyV said...

Millie - Liked this sweet, sweet story very much. It's a nerve-racking thing, when a relationship is so perfect to introduce an element that would change it so completely. That touching scene at the end when he smiles and the baby kicks gives us a glimpse into an even happier future as a threesome.

Very satisfying and well-written.

kgilbert said...

Touching story. Good job.

September said...

awww....this brought tears to my eyes. So beautiful.

I'm a Kenny Chesney fan and I could hear the song "There goes my life" - the video is so touching. You think your life is gone...but you realize the baby is your life.

This touched me that way.
(wiping tears away now)

Scott said...

If this doesn't capture the female spirit, nothing does. Always worried about the could-bes!

angel said...

that was beautiful!

c.s. said...

as a parent, i never had this perspective until reading this one.

i can feel the immense yet simple love for one another.

very well done!

laughingwolf said...

aww shucks, so homey :)

jason evans said...

I like that you tackled such a real and troubling emotion. I hope they adapt too...although I know her fears are well founded. Well done. High marks.

Aine said...

I'm rooting for them. Having a baby should multiply love, not add constraints.

It is a choice after all, not a trap... if we choose to see it that way.