Sunday, January 11, 2009

Entry #55

A Hot Cuppa in Heaven
by Pisku

His son’s inquisitive nature was something Robin enjoyed. So when he felt a light tug against his trousers, he warmed up for another creative challenge.

"Are elevators dangerous? Why is that guy in the blue jeans so scared?” Ryan said, pointing towards an unsure man trying to board the elevator.

"Watch him carefully, Ryan".

The bloke shifted on his legs, hand against the moving railing, nervously putting one leg onto an emerging step. His body tilted slightly as he quickly moved the other leg onto it, momentarily unbalanced. Relieved, he looked ahead as the elevator slowly chugged upwards, and begun to enjoy the ride.

"You see Ryan, you could say it’s scary but you need to step on it to discover that it is fun!”

"What else can the elevator do dad?"

The follow through question catching him off guard, Robin said, "It’s a clever, but lazy man's invention. Just get on it and it takes you right up, into exactly where you want to go, with no effort whatsoever”.

"What's there on top dad? Why do we want to go there?"

At his wit's end, Robin looked around for an answer. He said, "Listen to that song Ryan?", and sang softly along

There’s a lady who’s sure

All that glitters is gold

And she’s buying a stairway to heaven

"Wow! The heaven's up there! Which one of those?"

"That one", Robin pointed to the FRESHLY BREWED COFFEE signboard, watching the wonderstruck seven year old dash towards the elevator.


JR's Thumbprints said...

There's nothing better than a young child wanting reassurance before trying something new. You really captured that moment.

B. Nagel said...

Wonderful. Reminds me of the dad in Calvin and Hobbes. and my own.

laughingwolf said...

kids and their Qs, mine were the same :D

Lena said...

awww...that was surely cute :)

September said...

sweet story - and mmmm, the aroma of freshly-brewed coffee - heaven-like indeed.

*~*{Sameera}*~* said...

Awww!That was sweet.Ryan would surely love escalators all his life :)

Anonymous said...

love the general 'feel good' that runs through the story...very nice.

peggy said...

Thats just adorable! Excellent story from the picture< Great job!

Leatherdykeuk said...

Sweet :)

Sarah Hina said...

I liked the father-son interaction here, how strong their connection was. A lot of warmth and good will to be treasured.

We all have our own idea of Heaven. ;) Nicely told, Pisku!

sawan said...

a nice way to put it! portrayed the kid's curiosity and his dad's affection wonderfully! nice read.

Anonymous said...

Any story that ends with coffee (particularly at a mall - possibly Starbucks? Yes, I'm a junmkie) is a good one.

K.Lawson Gilbert said...

That is my idea of and coffee! Good story.

pisku said...

@ all you folks.

thanks so much :)

Catvibe said...

Very sweet and well written. Would that we all could have such empathic fathers.

Margaret said...

Have to make this quick, need a coffee :)
Loved your story, the dialogue btw father & son, questions & answers.
And Heaven being so near..
Nice one Pisku.

Anonymous said...

Great job on pacing, technical skill, storytelling, and voice! And welcome to the Forties Club!!

Thanks for being a wonderful part of the contest.