Wednesday, July 15, 2009

Entry #143

Drinking to Death
by Blog Gore


Two young sweaty bodies in the throes of passion on top of a water tank of a high-rise rooftop - an inch away from a sheer fall and death. Bodies coloured and illuminated in blue fluorescent light cast by a neon advertising signboard.

He enters her with his tongue – exploring the woman inside her. Slowly, feeding her desires. She moans as he pulls out and bites the inside of her thigh, an inch away from where she wants him. He moves up. His hands replace his tongue. Fingers finding love.

He kisses her. Tongues find each other and dance.

His other hand reaches out, groping in the dark for the knife.

“Are you ready” he asks. “Yes” she moans.

He kneels between her legs and very slowly, he enters her. She feels him inside her. As she moans, he takes the knife and slashes his wrists.

Blood Drops On Breasts.

She closes her eyes and whimpers as he cuts her wrists.

He finds her wrists in his mouth while he takes his to her lips. They drink of each other. The taste of blood and sex – intoxicating the senses as wine never can. They keep stroking and drinking – immune to pain.

They had been planning this for days.

The stars shine down on their bloodied faces. Ruby red coupling with fluorescent blue.


The stars give way to the morning sun. He looks down at them with sadness and hides behind the clouds to curse and cry. Young. Horny. Stupid.

DEAD.

34 comments:

JR's Thumbprints said...

This is really graphic ... and bloody ... at first I thought the title was a toast to death, until I got to the ending.

laughingwolf said...

not a pleasant way to go...

Hoodie said...

Um, Woah.

Creepy. The best part was when the sun thought they were dumb.

If your intent was to shock you surely succeeded. There was some great writing hidden in the gore.

Therese said...

Okay gross. Really gross.

But well written.

I love the last paragraph, where the sun judges the aftereffects. And I really like the sentence "Ruby red coupling with fluorescent blue."

As the Mind Meanders said...

@ JR

Thank You for the comments.

As the Mind Meanders said...

@ Laughingwolf

No... not a nice way to go... but these things happen... sad but true...

Rohan said...

MAAAAN!!!

What inspired you....???

Good to find you here..but like this???

hehe..i like it...but makes me sick at the same time...u lived upto your identity here, blog gore...

As the Mind Meanders said...

@ Hoodie

Thank You. The sun and the stars were Metaphors for our collective social conscience... and we had a 250 word limit... so its up to interpretation...

It was meant to shock... but not in a nice way...

As the Mind Meanders said...

@ Therese

Sorry. But it was meant to be gross and make you sick... youth is a very exciting time... and sometimes dangerous too...

As the Mind Meanders said...

Rohan Rohan... Hello...

What inspired me... You... I mean.. your blog post brought me here...

And the story was inspired by the picture... ruby red in dark space admist fumes of blue... this was my interpretation... passion,
danger and death...

And it was meant to make the reader sick... Hopefully it makes people think...

Rohan said...

Hmm...all that was in a lighter vein dude...chill...it certainly does make one think...

Ranee Kaur Banerjee said...

Well, you've certainly shocked me into silence!

As the Mind Meanders said...

@ Rohan

I know you were kidding dude... just wanted to explain the thought process behind the story.

Ranee

I loved your story and you are just next door...

And I shocked you did I... at least my characters didn't bite :-)

Deb S said...

Good writing. Very evocative.

As the Mind Meanders said...

Thank You Deb

quin browne said...

whoa.

As the Mind Meanders said...

whoa-t... why whoa ??? :-)

Catvibe said...

With a name like 'Blog Gore' I knew this would be bloody. Sexy and gory both! Well written. Should this be a warning to the young? :-D

As the Mind Meanders said...

@ Catvibe

Thank You... I don't always write gory stuff :-)...

I am glad you liked it...

I don't think I am qualified to advice the young... I have been wild too :-)

This was just about a couple of people who to it to another extreme level... I guess a lot of people are smarter :-)

Aerin said...

I think I'm glad you came over b/c of Rohan? I'm not a gore fan myself, even an intellectually-stimulating type of gore, but I can tell from your writing I'd like to read your non-gore stuff. :)

As the Mind Meanders said...

@ Aerin

Thank You. I am glad that you liked what you read.

I am not a gore writer myself... dunno what came over me... Something in that photograph, i guess... :-)

BernardL said...

Wow... young and stupid indeed.

pjd said...

This isn't autobiographical, is it?

Like others, I was drawn in by its graphic and unrelenting nature. Why is "Blood Drops On Breasts" in initial caps? I found that more distracting than dramatic.

This one kinda goes with the one about the artist pursuing perfection. A little chlorine in the gene pool...

September said...

Call me weird, but I thought it was beautiful in an extremely bloody and gory way. Very graphic. So much imagery. Great job in writing this.

Aniket said...

I like gory. I love gory. I love this.

Blood is tasty. Especially warm blood. But slashing wrists is a bad bad idea. Arteries in wrists, neckline and the one on the thighs should be left alone. Largest ones, them. :)

Good job!

Tessa said...

Oof! A whack in the solar plexus, this one! Shudder-making in the extreme, but exceptionally well written. Very clever, original take on the prompt. Great stuff.

As the Mind Meanders said...

@ Bernard...
Yes... Young and stupid... and dangerous...

@pjd
No isnt autobiographical... I aint dead and never slashed any part of my body... and thank you for the feedback on the blood drops on breasts line

@ September...
Thank You...

@ Aniket
Stop drinling blood before you have to be stopped mate :-)

@Tessa
Glad you liked it... hope the whack did not hurt too much...

JaneyV said...

Blog Gore I think this is a well written piece even though the subject matter itself is so deeply disturbing. There are some truly wonderful lines in here
Ruby red coupling with fluorescent blue.
is particularly strong.

Sonia said...

Scary and gory!

PEOPLE, PLACES, VOICES, FACES... said...

Hey! You're in the 40s club--congratulations!

As the Mind Meanders said...

Thank You ranee

jason evans said...

Reminded me of a more brutal form of autoerotic asphyxiation gone wrong. The scene was potently painted. Very vivid and intense.

Welcome to The Forties Club!

As the Mind Meanders said...

Thank You so much Jason... Its an honour...

Jaye Wells said...

Is it wrong I didn't really find this gory? It's graphic, but I think to avoid those details would have watered down the story. Good job.