Reply No. 26
by Señor Steve
idees some foks here have for runnin off birds roostin in trees in city park are ridiculus. honestly. i think they gakles some of them gakles took to roostin over my new porch swing a couple winters back. i can say that hangin cds and pots and pans in the raffers dind work the rubber snakes and the pastik hoot owl are still in the garage still covered with gakle poop. some say they is a thing you can hung up plug in what makes noise the birds hate. seems that only one store has them clean over in kansas and they cost. i mediated on the problem. a gakle is kind of raven. luke 12:24 consider the ravens, for they neither sow nor reap, which have neither storehouse nor barn; and God feeds them. of how much more value are you than the birds? phew. good qestion in the Good Book. i say some these foks with idees bout how to run off them gakles showing less brains then the gakles got. wich raises the neks qestion of who it is infestin this side of the river. gakles or peoples. may be we should be considerin how to run off somes of them foks wantin to blow off there remington 1100s and bottel rockets or stringin hot wires through the trees in the middle of the dammed city park. leave them dammed gakles be. they going to go on there own count one of these winter days. beulah
Tuesday, January 12, 2010
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~chortle~
Well done.
I have a sudden urge for chewing tobacco.
Absolutely fantastic! I'm particularly impressed with how this character's spirit is revealed through the nonchalance with spelling and punctuation, and just grammar in general, with all things except God and the Good Book. Very very nice!
Nevine
A class of itself old bean!
Great writing!
You nailed this voice. Great piece of writing!
too much work...
I had to check your blog to confirm if it wasn't your voice and just of the protagonist. Its that good.
I like the way you handled it, and like others mentioned - great voice here. But somehow was ard for me to read.
Reply No.#26 = "A Clockwork Black."
Very creative. --JR
Love it, Beulah. You go.
Awesome, this totally rocks! The voice is perfect, and the message is right on.
Ver convincing voice. Well done.
Tricky to read, but worthwhile, definitely.
This totally rocks, how you captured a voice!
Wow, oh, Wow!
Great voice.
I love the cantankerous voice of Beulah. I love her logic and her heart. The vernacular and lack of punctuation is an extremely effective device and brings her into vivid colour.
Gorgeous piece of writing.
Tricky to read, yes. Worth reading, yes. I got used to the voice as I went along. And that's great for so few words.
my caveat
Something I Would Keep
Holy smokes, Steve. You can't cheat like this. Setting a microphone in front of my grandma doesn't count as writing fiction.
Something I Might Tweak
I stumbled a little with her "dammed" because of the otherwise sort of piety (and not just the reference to God, but the whole tone)
Well worth the time it took to decipher!
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