Wednesday, January 13, 2010

Entry #185

Goodbye
by Dawn Levin


I release you my child, I release you.
Take flight knowing where to land.
Land with knowing when to leave.
Do both with all your might.
Know that your freedom is in your wings.
Fly fearless, fly free.

22 comments:

Aniket said...

Every parent has to do that, in most cases reluctantly. :)

Though they hold the right opposite notion, the song 'Mama said' comes to mind.

Short and sharp.

Tara said...

Just lovely.

Laurel said...

Beautiful! Passing the torch to the next generation.

angel said...

Fabulous Dawn! So much said in so few words!

Preeti said...

Beautiful.

Only a true poet can say it all with just a few lines. so simply expressed yet such a profound meaning lies beneath the words.

Loved it. Totally.

Deb Smythe said...

Beautiful.

lena said...

That might be the shortest piece here. Very beautiful.

laughingwolf said...

love it...

Jean Ann Williams said...

Well done. It's of a truth.

Jean Ann

Craig said...

Short and very sweet

pjd said...

recently empty-nested?
A charming poem. It is difficult but thrilling to watch the little ones get independent here and there. Some day not too far off I'll be thinking this same poem.

James R. Tomlinson said...

To "let go" isn't always easy. I'm certainly glad to take a break from all those stories about released souls. Nice to see some variety.

JaneyV said...

Dawn - you said so much in so few words. Beautifully.

Auds said...

Dawn,
This brought tears to my eyes. Such a beautiful sentiment so beautifully said.

Aerin said...



my caveat

Something I Would Keep

I WOULD SCRAP THE WHOLE POEM SO THAT POOR MOTHERS DON'T START CRYING AND HAVE THEIR HUSBANDS ASK WHAT IS WRONG....

Oh, um, sorry. I'm feeling a little emotional. Obviously. This is particularly poignant for me as I have a child with special needs. A LOT done in such short space - masterful.

Something I Might Tweak

"Land with knowing when to leave" - I might take out the word "with" - not sure

Sarah Laurenson said...

Letting go is never easy. Well done.

Aimee Laine said...

A wish by all parents. :) Beautiful. ;)

Chris Eldin said...

Simple and beautifully written. Nice!! :-)

Terri said...

This is beautiful, Dawn. Just beautiful.

catvibe said...

Funny, in the novel I am in the middle of, I wrote a poem very much like this. The protagonist wrote it actually, for her daughter. And so I connect strongly with it. My own kids are early 20s. Short and sweet. I have to stop or my comment will be longer. :-)

Anonymous said...

THIS IS WRITTEN BY MY LITTLE SISTER!!
Dawn....how long I have BEGGED you to w.r.i.t.e? You have so much to tell the Universe. Don't stop now. This is beautiful and I honor you.
Your very proud fifty something big sister.

Anonymous said...

So profound!! Love it. You have such a gift with words.
Love
Paula