Listening for the words in a quiet corner of the night. The fiction, poetry, and photography of Jason Evans.
Every parent has to do that, in most cases reluctantly. :)Though they hold the right opposite notion, the song 'Mama said' comes to mind.Short and sharp.
Beautiful! Passing the torch to the next generation.
Fabulous Dawn! So much said in so few words!
Beautiful.Only a true poet can say it all with just a few lines. so simply expressed yet such a profound meaning lies beneath the words. Loved it. Totally.
That might be the shortest piece here. Very beautiful.
Well done. It's of a truth.Jean Ann
Short and very sweet
recently empty-nested?A charming poem. It is difficult but thrilling to watch the little ones get independent here and there. Some day not too far off I'll be thinking this same poem.
To "let go" isn't always easy. I'm certainly glad to take a break from all those stories about released souls. Nice to see some variety.
Dawn - you said so much in so few words. Beautifully.
Dawn,This brought tears to my eyes. Such a beautiful sentiment so beautifully said.
my caveatSomething I Would KeepI WOULD SCRAP THE WHOLE POEM SO THAT POOR MOTHERS DON'T START CRYING AND HAVE THEIR HUSBANDS ASK WHAT IS WRONG....Oh, um, sorry. I'm feeling a little emotional. Obviously. This is particularly poignant for me as I have a child with special needs. A LOT done in such short space - masterful.Something I Might Tweak"Land with knowing when to leave" - I might take out the word "with" - not sure
Letting go is never easy. Well done.
A wish by all parents. :) Beautiful. ;)
Simple and beautifully written. Nice!! :-)
This is beautiful, Dawn. Just beautiful.
Funny, in the novel I am in the middle of, I wrote a poem very much like this. The protagonist wrote it actually, for her daughter. And so I connect strongly with it. My own kids are early 20s. Short and sweet. I have to stop or my comment will be longer. :-)
THIS IS WRITTEN BY MY LITTLE SISTER!!Dawn....how long I have BEGGED you to w.r.i.t.e? You have so much to tell the Universe. Don't stop now. This is beautiful and I honor you.Your very proud fifty something big sister.
So profound!! Love it. You have such a gift with words.LovePaula
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