Wednesday, January 13, 2010

Entry #222

Just Another Day
by Annemaria Cooper


It didn’t matter that the dawn was dismal with its light, or the birds overhead didn’t notice Molly beneath the tree. She pulled her hat over her ears, and continued walking towards the shore.

‘Another day,’ said Molly, stopping again to catch her breath.

‘It’s a wonderful day, Molly,’ replied John, reaching for her hand. ‘Are you tired?’

‘A little, yes. Perhaps I should sit in the chair now. I doubt I can manage up to the ridge.’ For a moment, Amy stared at the wheelchair. Pondered at the dip in the cushion and the space it would hold in future. She settled in, her eyes blurry with tears as John tucked the blanket down the side of her thin thighs. ‘Right,’ she said, composing herself, ‘to the top and the view of the sea.’

A thin, dark line separated the Heaven from the Earth.

‘Look Amy, can you see the Irish Ferry on the horizon.’

A crow flew overhead, perhaps to welcome the ferryman, thought Molly. ‘Will you ever come back here,’ she asked.

‘Every Sunday, and every Friday I’ll go to the theatre and sit in the stalls.’ He knelt, devoted, distraught and kissed her on the forehead.

‘Good. I’d like that, but promise me you’ll never visit my grave.’

‘I promise, Molly, but first you have to promise me something.’

The sun broke through to cast a warm glow on her tired face. ‘I guess I can make any promise I like now.’

‘Promise me tomorrow, Molly.’


(Annemaria Cooper is usually found loitering around chapterseventynine.com for her crimes.)

22 comments:

Jean said...

beautiful.

Bernita said...

Oh, sweet...honest and sincere.

Laurel said...

So so so so sad!

Jean Ann Williams said...

Sad, but honest.

Jean Ann

Mahesh Sindbandge said...

That last line really had something :)

Beautiful feeling of Love and Hope.

All the best :)

Cheers
Mahesh

McKoala said...

Very moving.

Aniket Thakkar said...

So very touching. Untainted love.

Thank you for such a beautiful piece.

laughingwolf said...

annemaria, nicely done!

Anonymous said...

I'm officially crying.

Anonymous said...



Caveat

Something I Would Keep

the sweetness of the relationship is nicely conveyed

Something I Might Tweak

I'm unclear as to whether there are two or three characters - Molly, Amy and John?

Anonymous said...

Yes, this was very very touching. Loved it!

Preeti said...

Oh Good God.

That was so beautiful. I can't say more.

James R. Tomlinson said...

This has a Victorian feel to it. I would've liked more detail regarding the wheelchaired character, what led to it.

Deb Smythe said...

Very touching.

I was a little confused as to who was Amy and who was Molly. Were they they one in the same?

Beth said...

Your opening was very strong. Nice job.

JaneyV said...

Bittersweet and movingly told but like Aerin I was a tad confused as Molly and Amy seemed to be the same person. But the details and descriptions were gorgeous and the final line was beautiful.

Craig said...

A real whirlwind of emotions here.

TL said...

Very moving story, but like othes I'm confused by Amy and Molly?

Rachel Green said...

what a sweet, sad vignette.

PJD said...

Superb finish. I can see the moment clearly. My only confusion was at the beginning, when I thought Molly was a little girl pulling her hat down over her ears. It wasn't until the wheelchair that I fully realized she was grown up.

Kartik said...

Sweet and sad ... you pulled off the bittersweetness very well!

Unknown said...

I hope she was able to keep her promise.

Congrats on the H/M

Dottie