Sunday, January 10, 2010

Entry #94

Flightiness
by Elizabeth Proctor


There are only a few berries left on the tree.

That means it’s time for me to move on-but where to? If the berries are gone here, won’t they be gone everywhere? What about my mate? Is he willing to take flight and move on with me? Maybe not… He seems too content to sit on that branch and stare at the parrot in the window of that house over there.

As if she would look at him twice! And just think of their children if they were lucky (or silly) enough to have any! They won’t have her coloring, that’s for sure. They would probably end up all dingy shades of gray, muddy and washed out. That’s the problem with flashiness-you just can’t pass it on intact. The kids ALWAYS suffer.

I wonder what the weather is like up there. The others seem to be happy with it. At least they are flying along and not stopping. Do they know there are almost no berries left? Is one of them going to swoop down and eat the last ones on MY summer tree? Would they even care that this is MY tree? Some birds are just SO blind to property rights, you know.

Is heSTILL staring at that parrot? One day the cat living there will get him. Is it too late to head out today? The sun looks like it’s going down; it looks like rain, too. I think I’m going to eat those berries!

22 comments:

Lena said...

That was an interesting point of view. Guess we are all the same, looking at parrots around us searching for something better when we already have something special.

Good work.

Preeti said...

:-)
Nicely written. I am amazed at the entries which have humanized the birds. Made them think, feel, emote...
Very nice.

Bernita said...

Now that's a cute perspective!
Him and his "ladybird!"

Ayodele Morocco-Clarke said...

It's always the same no matter what type of creature one is...Disgruntled females and philandering males with roving eyes...oh well....maybe the cat might just make her day by gobbling up her mate. Nice one.

JaneyV said...

Eat the berries and fly on Sweetie! Once the parrot starts talking he'll be hot on your tail anyway!

What a lovely piece Elizabeth..

Aimee Laine said...

Always wanting what others have -- always trying to keep what we have. Interesting perspective!

Craig said...

Convincing perspective.

Aniket said...

You get two thumbs up from me just for this line (all others were good too) "The kids ALWAYS suffer."

Truer words were rarely spoken(or written :D)...

Sarah Laurenson said...

Love this take on the prompt. Good job.

(I'm rooting for the cat.)

pjd said...

LOL Sarah! Though to be honest, I don't blame him for checking out the parrot...

Kartik said...

A very different perspective. Liked it!

Scribblers Inc said...

So much fun! :D

What would this place do without people like you! :)

Mithun Mukherjee

Meghan said...

I love the unique PoV, and the line about the children always suffering. Well done!

laughingwolf said...

too cool, love it...

Laurel said...

This made me giggle except that it rings a bit too true to humanity. Stay with the tenuous security of the relationship and risk poverty? What will she eat if she waits too long to do the smart thing and head south? She can't make him come with her. Surely she won't suffer the starvation of winter because of his infatuation with the harlot in the colored feathers.

Four Dinners said...

A female crow - a crowette?...;-) - sounding worryingly like my wifey...;-)

Excellent and different. I like different and I certainly like this.

Thank you for such originality.

Elizabeth Proctor said...

Thank you all for your encouraging comments. :)

Elizabeth

truevoid said...

as lena said - searching for something better when we already have something special. interesting take.

james r. tomlinson said...

I like it when a story gives me the conflict up front and winds its way through the obstacles. Nice POV.

Chris Eldin said...

I also hope the cat gets his way! This piece made me laugh out loud! I enjoyed reading it!

catvibe said...

What I liked was the chronic ADD that this bird character seems to have. Which might account for the title :-) Fun take, enjoyed it.

Aerin said...

Dear Entrants #1-105,

I have read your pieces so that I can fairly participate in the Readers' Choice vote. (I read all of them through last week, before I started commenting.) I will be coming back around to offer my keep/tweak comment, but I didn't want anyone to snark.

Cheers,
Aerin (#236)

BTW, it's perfectly fine if you still want to snark, but this way you can choose a more appropriate subject, like the Golden Globes or those wretched Old Navy dummies.