Tuesday, July 19, 2011

Entry #79

Big Bang
by Jay R. Thurston


A clock rested, silent and still.

Dual glows emerged against a black backdrop. A silhouette of fingers in orange light flickered across the young faces of their wielders.

“It worked,” Eve spoke.

“I had no doubt,” her twin Dawn responded.

“What now?”

“Let’s combine them.”

Eve offered her fiery sphere.

Dawn rejected. “Not like that. Let’s give it some spark. Have them meet mid-air.”

“You’re crazy. That’ll kill us.”

“Stop being overdramatic. One quick flash and it will be over.”

“It’s going to backlash, Dawn.”

“Nothing will be destroyed.” Dawn’s giggle diminished as she stepped backwards. Her fireball shrunk in Eve’s eye. “Make space if you’re worried about backlash.”

“Let’s do this. It’s getting hot to hold.” Eve shifted her weight. Her sister mimicked a reflection across the dark expanse.

“Ready?”

“I’ve been ready.”

“GO!”

Both girls thrust their glowing spheres towards the other; their visages claimed in trailing blackness. The projectiles soared through the empty void, closer and closer.

Contact.

Light bleached the heavens. A roaring explosion of epic magnitude sent embers awry in every direction. Particles of light sped outward, toward oblivion. Deafening rumbles subsided, until the contact point rid itself of smoke and the last debris.

The ultimate silence gave way to a quick and steady repetition of sound.

Tick… Tick… Tick…

19 comments:

Chris Allinotte said...

Great characters, and a magic that doesn't seem contrived.

The ending is great too - leaves us wondering.

Timothy P. Remp said...

I loved the ending with 'time' started from the big bang event. Very creative and imaginative.

-Tim

Aimee Laine said...

And interesting way of restarting or creating time!

Linda Ryan-Harper said...

If a clock ticks in a primordial soup and no one is around to hear, will it still make me late for work?

Catrina said...

The names of these characters work well. Fitting how Eve works on so many different levels.

Third to last paragraph (Light bleached the heavens...) brought me there. I could see it.

Good job!

Precie said...

Very cool. The creation of the universe as child's play.

Damyanti said...

I like this version of the beginning of time. Lovely story.

pegjet said...

The big bang theory in your hands is masterful! Sisters fighting, then on the same side, then really mucking up the world--better than reality tv.

I liked this one, Jay.

Dottie (Tink's Place) said...

Ahhh... so this is how the universe was created? I love the word play of the names... Eve and Dawn... the eve of the dawn of life kind of thing.

Nicely done!

Dottie :)

bluesugarpoet said...

I just knew that creation had a woman's touch! ;) I like your clever take on a timeless tale. ~Jana A

Katherine Tomlinson said...

What a great interpretation of the Big Bang!

Old Kitty said...

What a build-up!!!!! Wonderful!! Of course Eve and her twin Dawn created all life! Yay! take care
x

Rachel said...

Still pondering....liked it a lot! Very impressed you had females in charge...In the beginning....

Loved the last line....

Still pondering...

Mikki said...

Intriguing concept brought to life with vivid detail. I love the twins' names.

Thank you for sharing!

Rabid Fox said...

I liked the rhythm of the story, here. I thought it worked well and left me wanting more.

Richard Levangie said...

Jay: The BIg Bang in 250 words — ambitious! I like how much fun you have with it, and how it all began as a kind of dare!

Aerin said...

Yay, another Eve! I love that she has a twin, and I like your sense of dialogue and action, hard to do in 250 words!

JaneyV said...

Creation as the backlash of the foolish games of two bored children? What a totally unique and intriguing premise. Eve and Dawn. Excellent.

jason evans said...

What a great concept! Loved that idea. Very momorable.

Congrats on Forties Club!