Wednesday, February 27, 2008

Entry #55

Alone...
by Kim Watters


They say the fire was the most devastating thing that happened in this area to date. It's still talked about to this day...in whispers...

I'm just an ordinary person, average, no special talent to talk about, wouldn't set the world on fire, until that night, years ago, it started. I woke up to find myself alone in a field, not knowing how I got there, or why. I mean, the only thing in the barren field besides myself was…a tree. That's when the first whispers started, the whispers that told me to...

A few months later, I woke up to find myself alone in a field, again. How did I get here? Why was I here? Then…the whispers…they hypnotized me, mesmerized me, I could just make out the words, “here...over here...come to me...I need you to...There was no one there, so who was whispering...or what was whispering...I snapped out of the hypnotic-like trance and ran...

Six months later, I once again woke up...in the field...by the tree...the whispers, louder still, telling me that I'll get my hearts desire, promising me beauty, wealth, everything beyond my wildest dream, if only...WHAT, what is it that I'm supposed to do to get my hearts desire and everything else that it promises. I ran, ran as fast as I could from those haunting whispers...

A year later...I heard the stories going around. They say the fire was the most devastating thing that happened in this area to date. It's still talked about today...in whispers...

10 comments:

JLB said...

Wonderful use of the "whispers" theme. I like all the possibilities of this piece!

Beth said...

I also like the use of "whispers" and tree together.

Sarah Hina said...

I really like that you left a lot to our imaginations here. This is a nicely creepy piece of fiction.


Good work! :)

Aerin said...

Ah, the voices in my head! I toyed with that, too, but you did it far more justice than I could have. I love phrase "wouldn't set the world on fire" and it dual meanings. Thanks!

SzélsőFa said...

Creepy indeed, and I too, like the use of the fire-related saying here.

paisley said...

i wonder how many of us would NOT sell our soul.....

Absolute Vanilla (& Atyllah) said...

A haunting and thought provoking piece of writing. Excellent use of the whispers theme.

bluesugarpoet said...

"I'm just an ordinary person, average" - a nice little irony intertwined in this piece. Haunting indeed!

jason evans said...

I liked this. Good vision. The story behind the narrative voice intrigues me.

Aine said...

Yikes-- another whispering tree! I've learned one thing from this contest: if I ever hear a tree whispering, I will run... as fast as I can!

You set up a compelling mystery. I want to know more.