Wednesday, July 16, 2008

Entry #64

Goodnight, Ladies
by Missy Vinson


Screaming over his body, the wind disheveled any remainder of the ordered life Norman led. Flying twenty-six inches off the ground at an exhilarating speed does that.

Norman hugged each sensual curve in the road with a perfect balance of nonchalance and powerful control. As he glanced askew to avoid the brights of on-coming traffic, Norm sensed a female in the passing car, knowing she was imagining his smooth dexterity in another way altogether. The taut, worn leather encasing Norman was more than protective road gear – it revealed an animal nature displayed in his puma-like posture. Crouched low for speed, Norman did indeed appear almost predatory.

Licking his lips and scanning the roadside as he stopped at a light, Norman noticed the looker from the night before. He gunned the engine the second the light turned green. The wheels spun, creating an unforgettable mark with sound, smoke and a few sparks. She’d move a little quicker next time, maybe slide in behind him and slip her arms around him before he peeled off again. It was her call; Norman didn’t chase anyone.

He picked up speed again, weaving in and out of cruising cars full of wandering teens. A vibration hit him in the chest. Norman pulled over and quickly slid off his helmet.

“This is Norm…”

“Norman Mankin, where the hell are you? I need those diapers, NOW! The twins are both wet, and there’s only one left!”

“I’ll be home right away, dear!”

“That damn bike…”

16 comments:

Sarah Hina said...

What a wake-up call! Poor Norm. ;)

I liked his transformation from night predator to whipped husband and dad. You did a really nice job of putting a cold shower on all that swagger.

Very sensual writing, with a bit of humor too. Nicely done!

laughingwolf said...

nice twist, missy :)

JR's Thumbprints said...

...nice characterization of a new dad acting out his freedom--even if it's only momentary.

September said...

Funny ending. Guess Mr. Tough Guy wasn't so tough afterall....well, he was for a little while.
Nice work, Missy.

JaneyV said...

It's wonderful the way just riding a bike can induce all kinds of fantasy. I love the way his Puma-sex-god image of himself gets punctured at the end. Great fun!

Scott said...

Ha! Great twist.

Aerin said...

My twin toddler nieces live just across the street, so there are four toddlers (mine & hers) in close proximity - and I can tell you - the diaper thing is a BIG deal. GREAT story.

Vesper said...

Ha! Ha! Ha! The difference between our dreams and our reality… How ironic! Nicely done.

c.s. said...

this is really a fun read! well-constructed without giving away too much! i like... :)

*~*{Sameera}*~* said...

That was a nice,unexpected ending!

Well done :)

Dottie said...

Ditto on the above comments. Well done.

angel said...

bucking frilliant!

c.s. said...

don't we all dream at times?

brilliantly funny, this one.

your words and phrases are simply powerful...

Julie Weathers said...

This was so much fun. I loved the ending.

SzélsőFa said...

I liked how easily this flowed, and the twist at the end was just great. I had a good laugh there.

jason evans said...

Yep. The economy pack of diapers on the back. It's funny, but not funny too. Very real. Given time, unhappiness always grows. High marks overall.