Wednesday, January 14, 2009

Entry #95

Antithesis
by Yamini Murty


It seemed like an eternity, flying in the sky. His impatience was reaching the acme as he craved to breathe the fresh air of his homeland. He peeped outside the window thinking about his folks, desperately waiting to see them. He slipped into a Utopian fantasy imagining the wonderful times that were in store. Raj's face lit up as he heard the announcement. His lashes were wet with joy as he waited intently for the jet to land...

She tried to hold back the tears as she parked her car in the parking lot. She'd never felt so helpless in her life. She walked towards the foyer and wished that she'd disappear for a moment. She moved towards the escalator with all the strength she had.

Meera felt numb as the crowd rushed hurriedly towards the entrance. She realized that the flight had landed.

Raj walked towards the exit and scrutinized all the faces, trying to spot a known one. He eagerly waited for someone to rise up the escalator.

As the escalator moved up, Meera relived all the moments of terror, bloodshed and shock. The dead, wounded faces of Raj’s parents sent a chill through her spine.

She saw Raj walking towards her. She couldn’t hold back her tears as she saw him wave elatedly.

He held her close, pressing her cheeks with his wet ones. Tears were inexorable.

He looked deep in her eyes and she wondered what to say..

They cried together - for different reasons…

17 comments:

*~*{Sameera}*~* said...

That was moving.Good piece!

Lena said...

so touching.. beautiful!

Aniket Thakkar said...

Well Yamini... You finally made it... and how!!! Honestly, this one is the best work of yours that I have read so far... Remarkable job lady!!! And I know whats your reply is going to be for this "Keep Inspiring" right? lolz!

The Preacherman said...

Oh 'eck...you're not supposed to make a grown man cry...;-)

Touching doesn't sound enough but you know what I mean eh?

Ÿ∂ Μ Î ŋÎ said...

@Sameera, Lena: Thank you.

@Aniket: Thank you bud... Keep inspiring ;)

@ The Preacherman: I exactly know what u mean. But it is all about human emotions, and who said grown men do not cry? Thanks for the insight, though.

Sarah Hina said...

What a poignant, bittersweet reunion, Yamini. And interesting choice to give us both of their perspectives. It made it seem like the north-south poles of a magnet were closing.

Very lovely writing. And what an emotional ending! Great work. :)

varu..... said...

yamini as usual it was a treat reading your story..and u have well penned the emotions of Meera and Raj.Beautiful and a very emotional write up...keep up the ggod work...

vishvam said...

hmmm.so many emotional moment in such a short master piece.

Catvibe said...

This piece gave me tingles, just a beautifully written piece.

RiverSoul said...

Loved this one,
Ya.
The way you've crafted this, really drives the point home
:)

sawan said...

maaan, that was so very emotional! and a set of well placed words! good one!!

ceedy said...

That was poignant.....very well written....

many a times we assume certain feelings people exude..but there might be a very different reality behind it...

Margaret said...

So much emotions, feelings in 250 words.
I like the way you gave us the thoughts of both Raj & Meera.

Very touching..

bluesugarpoet said...

This is a heart-wrenching story! Brilliant how you've included the perspective from both people.

jana

Ÿ∂ Μ Î ŋÎ said...

@Sarah Hina: I am glad you exactly got my point of view. I appreciate that. thanks a ton for the comment :)

@Varu,Vishvam: thanks bud.

@Catvibe: thank you

@RiverSoul: I am glad you liked it. thank you.

@sawan: thank you.

@ceedy: you are right in saying that there are times when we merely assume certain expressions or feelings. There can be a lot of depth beyond what we perceive. thanks for the comment:)

@Margaret: thank you :)

@bluesugarpoet: thank ya :)

September said...

Oh Yamini, This was just beautiful. Pulling at out heartstrings.... I can see the makings of a whole movie with this. Great work.

jason evans said...

Thanks for being a wonderful part of the contest!