Saturday, July 11, 2009

Entry #55

by Jim Stitzel

She swirled her finger in the glass, then lifted it to his mouth.

"Just a taste, my lover," she crooned.

He parted his lips, tongue sampling the drop as it fell from her fingertip.

"Oh, my god," he breathed. "Amazing."

He closed his eyes, fell back on the pillows, she on top of him. They writhed together, touching, feeling.

"You are my one..." he whispered.

" only," she echoed.

Their skin split, bone pushing through flesh, cries of pain and pleasure escaping their torn lips. In moments, the union was complete, the nightmare creature quivering on the floor.

They would always be together.


Laurel said...

That was...unexpected. And very creepy. What the hell were they drinking? I'd very much like to avoid it at the liquor store...

The scene left me curious. Did they know what they were drinking had transmutive effects? Did they choose it?

wrath999 said...

Great & unique imagination. I enjoyed it


Aimee said...

Oh *that* is freaky! :)

laughingwolf said...

talk about 'getting together' :O lol

JR's Thumbprints said...

Quite the merge ... and without an overkill of descriptors. Still, I wonder what kind of creature they became.

The Preacherman said...

Puts a whole new meaning to "two become one". Well creepy mate. Loved it!

Four Dinners

Chris Eldin said...

Left me wanting a bit more backstory, but overall very nicely done!

Catvibe said...

Cool! They merged! Gives new meaning to 'when two become one'.

Adisha said...

Horrifying !!!

Aniket said...

I'll comment in a sec.

Let me just switch on the lights first. :)

To freak out everyone in just 103 words. Good job.

Jim said...

Laurel, you can't buy what they were drinking at the liquor store. Special blend, and all that. They knew what they were drinking -- and welcomed it.

Thanks, wrath. I'm a big fan of 'strange' fiction.

I aim to please, Aimee! :)

No joke, wolf. Puts a whole new spin on the idea, doesn't it?

JR, one of the things I love doing with dark fiction is leaving it up to the reader to fill in some of the blanks. I tend to think dark fiction becomes even more horrifying when you do that because the reader can usually come up with something even more gruesome than I can.

Thanks, Preacher! Glad you liked it!

Chris, I think it's actually kind of fun to speculate on these two people. Who were they? What circumstances led them to this terrible union? Makes ya' wonder...

Cat, certainly gives you a whole new idea of 'union', doesn't it?

Kind words, Adisha. :)

Oh, no, Aniket. Keep those lights off! And just ignore those bumping, scraping sounds behind you.

Thanks for the comments, everyone. I really need to get back into writing again. This may be a great way for me to do that. :)

Sarah Laurenson said...

Yes. Please do get back into writing. Awesomely creepy and yet fascinating, too. And I don't usually like creepy.

Tessa said...

Yikes! That was a thwack in the solar plexus.

BernardL said...

A story to go along with the old 'Beast with two backs' line. Very sharp.

pjd said...

Yikes. I hope they really do like each other. A real unholy matrimony. I wonder if there's a divorce potion in their cupboard, too?

verification word: mates
No, I didn't make it up. I thing blogger spies on us.

B. Nagel said...

And that is how you make the beast with two backs.

Disturbingly good and goodly disturbing.

Word Ver = dingly.
A limp boat.

Patsy said...

Good story, but very scary drink!

JaneyV said...

eeeeewwwww! And yet deeply cool. I really liked this!

Terri said...

I don't know why, but I enjoyed this. Twisted yet somehow romantic, perhaps...?
(I think B Nagel summed it up well!)

Jade L Blackwater said...

Lovely metamorphosis - I like how you leave it up to the reader to envision their own, wretched nightmare creature!

Anonymous said...

Wow. Together indeed. I wonder if they knew they were about to spawn. Or something.

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